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americangothic Junior Member
since 2008-11-11
Posts 45 |
Me and the alley cat out in the street waxing poetic scouring for meat greasy hair soiled sweater the fur looked worse but his stroll was better alley and the fence fighting for morsels making no cents crazy homeless sweater guy of mangy friend and bloodshot eye plotting with his pet it doesn't get much worse I bet snoring on the street bugged by bugs and feline feet my silent fearless friend who met a wicked white walled end he never had a name but in the end its all the same |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is the first of yours I have read so I have to say welcome to Passions. This is a very sad street piece but open and vivid for the reader. Enjoyed. Eric |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
very interesting and creative. I really enjoyed the manic, stretched feeling of this. at first I thought the rhyming would have to be forced to follow through, but you managed it in a tough, street-slang kinda way that fit brilliantly with the piece. a sad tail perhaps, but a fun read! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
As they say, "It's a cat eat cat world out there!" ~ or is that a "dog eat dog" world out there?  Raw, stark ~ yet very effective in conveying "a cat eat cat world" out there!" ~ or is that a "dog eat dog world"? Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug, Earth Angel  |
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turtle Senior Member
since 2009-01-23
Posts 548Harbor |
Hi AG Your name happens to be the title of one of my poems. It's about the painting by Grant Wood. This is really good AG, I find it refreshing to read something that's not about found love, lost love, depression, or suicide. This could probably be improved upon, but it demonstrates that you truely have talent. thank you for sharing. turtle  |
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