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turtle
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0 posted 2009-02-07 03:58 PM



Imperfect moments

So many moments come to me,
I've combed the beaches of the world,
Stood moonlit nights in trailing seas,
On decks awash with sails unfurled.

I've cut salt spray on freshened breeze,
Where only soaring frigates dare.
Seen sunsets no one ever sees
From setting in their office chair.

I've glimpsed the wonder of God's hand
In places never touched by man.
Weighed anchor from the Rio Grande
To seaports circled south of Cannes.

Yet for a life that others dream,
My perfect moment never known.
Some moments may hold high esteem,
But all I've done I've done alone.

turtle

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2009-02-07 05:41 PM


Books, and poems such as yours,
are a good start to "seeing the world"
but it certainly helps when one
removes one's seat from his seat.

turtle
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2 posted 2009-02-07 06:49 PM


I'm sorry, I my clumsy attempt at economy of words. I can sound offensive, when that is not my intent at all.

I have gone back and edited my reply in your thread. My deepest apologies.

turtle

OwlSA
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3 posted 2009-02-08 02:41 AM


Turtle, it seems to me that the deepest, most sensitive, most aware people with poetry in their soul, struggle to find somebody similar.  There is a loneliness worse than being alone - the loneliness of being bound to a spouse who is the wrong person.  

Owl

americangothic
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4 posted 2009-02-08 02:58 AM


wow...you are really making me think after reading this one.  a really excellent piece
turtle
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5 posted 2009-02-08 02:22 PM


Owl, The multi-legged spider of time that pesters us in our youth,
and creeps about us in ugly faced reminder.
Often carries contentment on it's back.

Thanks AG. That is the best compliment that anyone can give.

Tuirtle

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6 posted 2009-02-09 01:08 PM


I liked your title before reading the poem... later considered it perfect. *S*

Excellent write!

OwlSA
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7 posted 2009-02-09 01:25 PM


Turtle, I enjoyed your reply (except the implication that spiders have ugly faces )  However, I guess you are entitled to your own opinion.  

Owl


Bill Charles
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8 posted 2009-02-09 04:30 PM


turtle - many things done and seen, but sad to do them alone. Telling write....

BC

Suncleaver
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9 posted 2009-02-09 04:33 PM


A great poem Turtle, and yes witnessing many wonders demands that you stand alone among your kind.

Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told.

2islander2
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10 posted 2009-02-09 06:11 PM


Hi turtle, I appreciate the discovery of your poetry...This is beautiful and from an inspiration which I care very much: travels...This is a sensitive and enjoyable read...

regards

yann

Margherita
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11 posted 2009-02-09 06:42 PM


Good that you can share your experiences in poetry, because the most beautiful moments become perfect only when we are able to share them.

Beautifully rendered reflections. Looking forward to a poem about one of those sunsets no one else sees ... makes me think of the Little Prince who too was alone watching his sunsets, lucky we were to read the masterpiece by A. de Saint-Exupéry!

Love,
Margherita

turtle
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12 posted 2009-02-10 11:54 AM


WOW! Thanks everyone, I thought this had slipped off the page.

This is an old poem I wrote for a poetry challenge...Write a poem about a perfect moment

turtle

OwlSA
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13 posted 2009-02-10 12:20 PM


Oh, yes, Margherita!  And that day he watched 66 (I think it was 66) sunsets, that day that he must have been so very sad . . .

Owl

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