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playerfrost New Member
since 2009-02-07
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Life, precious as fading memories You, worth even more I would give up every moment, every memory of every moment For one lingering gem, your face, your heart, floating in front of me, amongst soft whispers Flutterings finding my ear, I love you finding yours The sun is not half so bright, so warm, as I love you falling off your lips, jumping, finding it's way to the depths Past the memories, breaking through the sadness, tearing down walls that crumble, that slowly sneak away before you, ashamed at a light so bright We, because there is no more talk of You or I, We stand together, pillars of faith that cling to each other like so many dreams that light our world Our world, because the rest fades to nothing, falls back because we shine so bright, glitter in the night sky like stars, diamonds that span the universe Sing out with a million voices, I love you!, each one my voice carrying your name, Amber, floating, screaming through the black oblivion, to rest, whisper into your ear, soft slow pulsing with the beat of your heart, I'm sorry; our heart, flowing through our veins, golden streams of love that coarse through us, bind us, save us And with every breath, like the sighing of our soul, we draw together, like two wildflowers in a sea of black Two souls done with searching, coming together like the center of a rainbow, colors splashing together, colors, creating the palette of our lives Mixing together two souls that shine across eternity, breaking down the darkness And us like a sunrise splashing our golden rays on a day no longer dark, winning away the night to a day of endless possibilities, our rays chasing away any demons, fighting back the darkness that threatens to swallow a sun so bright, our love, the champion of our soul And if the dark should threaten, knock on the door step of a love so bright, with gritted teeth and hands held tight we will fight free to a brighter day, for the sun may set and the nights get cold, but the sun always returns and I promise always to keep you warm, with arms around your stomach, and a heart that will forever whisper your name, today, tomorrow, and for all the days and nights of my life, I love you. M.D.T. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
playerfrost - nice romantic write to one dear. Enjoyed reading this... BC |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Wonderful flow of emotions. Welcome to Passions. |
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turtle Senior Member
since 2009-01-23
Posts 548Harbor |
Nicely done. I especially liked the third strophe. This is a subject that is way overdone and it is rare to find a poem that expresses the sentiment of love well. If you are thinking of improving this, you might consider trimming it down a bit. turtle |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Player, you certainly made me smile with your enthusiasm! Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Splendid "Two souls done with searching, coming together like the center of a rainbow," I know what that feels like. Very nice! The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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