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ethome
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0 posted 2009-02-06 06:49 PM



I put my trust in future days
When I was young and needed faith
To face the dreams young men inspire
Searching for their heart's desire
The shades of love I never knew
Were hidden from my point of view.
While fantasies prepared my soul
For every pleasure lovers know.

(sung higher like a chorus)
And now the truth has come to fall
Upon those dreams of protocol
With mortgages and new car loans
and lovers never found at home.
I call to say I'm working late
you message says I'll have to wait
For future days without the haste.

A blue-eyed girl and winning smile
You captured me with grace and style
And there I was in love with you
With promises and phantom truth
And you became my romance queen
I fulfilled your knightly needs
With a guarantee of loyalty
And no question of our destiny.

(sung higher like a chorus)
Now it all comes down to time and place
And the truth of love all have to face
Where passion greets integrity
With uncertain strains of quality
And bills are paid with numbered ease
In future days where lovers meet.

(INSTRUMENTAL)

Now those of us who played the game
And realized the pain of change
Never knew when we were young
The curtain call would never come
Seems long ago and far away
When all the promises were made
And dreams they gave away for free
Dissolved into reality.

(sung higher like a chorus)
But we're still here and we still care
We treat ourselves when we dare
We find ourselves alone sometimes
Repenting for the loss of time
But then I hold you close to me
And say c'mon n dance with me
There's future days for you and me.


© Copyright 2009 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Robert E. Jordan
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1 posted 2009-02-06 08:39 PM


Yo Eric,

There are some pretty good lines in this country song.

Bobby

gilead
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2 posted 2009-02-06 09:37 PM


I knew this would be a treat when I saw the title. I love poetry that lends itself to song, and oral presentation. This is great---

art

ethome
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3 posted 2009-02-07 02:11 AM


Thanks Bobby
I appreciate the visit and the comments.

Eric

ethome
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4 posted 2009-02-07 03:28 AM


Thanks Art

I appreciate the visit and the song poem comments.


Eric

Margherita
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5 posted 2009-02-07 05:50 AM


quote:
We treat ourselves when we dare
We find ourselves alone sometimes
Repenting for the loss of time
But then I hold you close to me
And say c'mon n dance with me
There's future days for you and me.



Nothing like a romantic dance to overcome moments of melancholy.

A wonderful, touching write-chanson, dear Eric.

Love,
Margherita

Copperbell
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6 posted 2009-02-07 09:49 AM


so so true
Richy
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7 posted 2009-02-07 10:10 AM



0 to 60 in six decades, I would have to say that's the perfect speed to merge onto the highway of fufillment.

Wonderful song my friend!

Richy

LindsayP
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8 posted 2009-02-07 09:41 PM



Eric my friend that is a delight to read, a little sad but quite touching, well written.

Take care.

Lindsay

ethome
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9 posted 2009-02-07 11:59 PM


Thank you Margherita

Always so nice to have you read and comment.

Take care and have a wonderful day.

Eric

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2009-02-08 12:34 PM


Fine writing...James
ethome
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11 posted 2009-02-08 12:38 PM


Copperbell

Glad you could see the reality of truth in this piece. Love remains through all the elements of life's progression when loyalty and the deepest form of love carry one through all the ups and downs.

Eric

ethome
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12 posted 2009-02-08 04:54 AM


Richy

Thanks for the visit and the positive input. I appreciate the comments.

Eric

2islander2
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by the sea
13 posted 2009-02-08 07:56 AM


some sadness here I feel, but a very enjoyable read and so philosophical...

have a nice day

yann

Earth Angel
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14 posted 2009-02-08 12:47 PM


Great title! "0 to 60 In Six Decades"

I enjoyed your love song 'n dance.

~ and I always enjoy a happy, hopeful ending! "There's future days for you and me."


Linda


ethome
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15 posted 2009-02-08 02:56 PM


Lindsay

Thanks for the read and the delight word glad you could stop by.


James

Thank you for the read and the comment.

Eric

HelmutB
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16 posted 2009-02-08 07:02 PM


This is so to the point and I do like the ending....cause it seems so .....true

The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.  


ethome
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17 posted 2009-02-08 09:50 PM


Thank you Yann & Linda I do appreciate those fine kind comments. Drop in anytime for a visit.

Eric

steavenr
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18 posted 2009-02-09 12:23 PM


thank you for this fantastic tribute to love invested in time...you've described the relationship that can only grow with experience and age so well...this is a masterpiece (really reads good aloud)
ethome
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19 posted 2009-02-09 08:13 PM


Thanks Helmut

I appreciate those kind wirds and the visit.

Eric

ethome
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20 posted 2009-02-10 04:31 AM


Thank you Steavan for those fine superlatives describing this composition. I surely do appreciate the positive input and kind words.

Eric

Alison
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21 posted 2009-02-10 11:15 PM


Oh, I so long to hear this sung.  Thank you for sharing and for writing it so I could almost hear it.  It's like you teased me.  I want more. More, I say.  Okay, I'll calm down (maybe) ... if you sing it for us.

Eric, thank you.

Alison

ethome
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22 posted 2009-02-11 03:04 AM


Thank you Alison
Your response made me smile but also confirmed my knowledge that you're a person of creativity and passion and that's always good.

Take care

Eric

Kethry
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Victoria Australia
23 posted 2009-02-11 08:25 AM


It's a great song, but it reminds me I only have so many marbles left in my box and I shouldn't waste my time on work and paying bills. How about a nice picnic?

Keth

Always do more than is required of you George Patton

ethome
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24 posted 2009-02-11 03:27 PM


LOL!
Right on Kethry!

A picnic is the answer, it'll take me a few weeks to swim down there.

Thanks for the reply......(smile)......

Eric

suthern
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25 posted 2009-02-13 10:17 AM


Seems long ago and far away
When all the promises were made
And dreams they gave away for free
Dissolved into reality.

I loved these lines and the melancholy truth of them... but love the uplifting ending even more. *S* From title through last line, a complete delight. *S*

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
26 posted 2009-02-13 10:49 AM


Such wonder in that pen of song you have.  Would love to sit and hear you strum it live but will have to settle for the tour in blue.  Especially liked the ending in your instrumental but the whole was wonderful.
ethome
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Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
27 posted 2009-02-14 03:52 PM


Ruth

I am always so happy when you pay me a visit and your words are always so encouraging and wonderfully written.

I'll look for your work and pay you a visit soon...

Eric


Mark

It's great to see you hanging around here and I just read one of your wonderful creations and you haven't lost your touch for sure.

Thanks for the words of encouragement and drop in anytime.

Eric

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