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Suncleaver
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0 posted 02-05-2009 05:22 PM       View Profile for Suncleaver   Email Suncleaver   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Suncleaver

Take my heart and eat it whole
Taste my fire my burning soul
In life’s blood Dionysian wine
Feel the passion of art divine

Take my breath and breathe in deep
Imbibe my soul and with it keep
The elements of fire and wind
Treasure my virtues excise my sins

Take my tongue this silver coil
Plant your seeds in fertile soil
That they may grow beneath our love
Reach to the heavens and stars above

Take my hand and lead me true
Light a path from me to you
Reap the crop that you have sown
Be brave step through the unknown

Take my eyes take what they see
See yourself your true beauty
Cast away your jaded glass
And behold what may come to pass

All I am I am for you
Both the sublime and dissolute
Hear my song this siren call
Shall we fly? or shall we fall?


Dedicated to Shannon, my beloved.

Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told.

© Copyright 2009 Luke Doubtfire - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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Eternity


1 posted 02-05-2009 06:58 PM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Beautiful declaration and invitation I would say, dear Luke.

Of course you will soar ...

Love,
Margherita
Jax Nova
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2 posted 02-05-2009 07:31 PM       View Profile for Jax Nova   Email Jax Nova   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jax Nova's Home Page   View IP for Jax Nova

Very interesting word picture with some of those there.

I liked the flow and the rythm.

The fourth Stanza (last line) "Be brave step through the unknown"  threw me off a bit because of the flow but it may have been just me.

I always want to say "Be brave step through to the unknown."  *shrugs*

All in all nice write.
Earth Angel
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Realms of Light


3 posted 02-06-2009 11:14 AM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

Your fortunate Shannon must be amassing quite the treasure trove of love poems from her beloved!

They truly are exquisite in both sentiment and form!!!


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on the threshold of a dream


4 posted 02-09-2009 12:07 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

All I am I am for you
Both the sublime and dissolute

The entire poem is excellent, but I particularly like these lines... Shannon is a lucky lady! *S*
HelmutB
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5 posted 02-10-2009 08:01 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

So enchantingly well done!!

The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.  

raeann
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6 posted 06-24-2009 10:30 AM       View Profile for raeann   Email raeann   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for raeann

This is really good it has a lot of emotion in it and it catches the reader really well.(something i can never do with my poetry its more of a blur of words)ha. Well done!!
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