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Take My Heart
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Take My Heart |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England 
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Take my heart and eat it whole Taste my fire my burning soul In life’s blood Dionysian wine Feel the passion of art divine Take my breath and breathe in deep Imbibe my soul and with it keep The elements of fire and wind Treasure my virtues excise my sins Take my tongue this silver coil Plant your seeds in fertile soil That they may grow beneath our love Reach to the heavens and stars above Take my hand and lead me true Light a path from me to you Reap the crop that you have sown Be brave step through the unknown Take my eyes take what they see See yourself your true beauty Cast away your jaded glass And behold what may come to pass All I am I am for you Both the sublime and dissolute Hear my song this siren call Shall we fly? or shall we fall? Dedicated to Shannon, my beloved. Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Beautiful declaration and invitation I would say, dear Luke. Of course you will soar ... Love, Margherita  |
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Jax Nova Junior Member
since 2009-02-04
Posts 20OK |
Very interesting word picture with some of those there. I liked the flow and the rythm. The fourth Stanza (last line) "Be brave step through the unknown" threw me off a bit because of the flow but it may have been just me. I always want to say "Be brave step through to the unknown." *shrugs* All in all nice write. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your fortunate Shannon must be amassing quite the treasure trove of love poems from her beloved!  They truly are exquisite in both sentiment and form!!!  EA |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
All I am I am for you Both the sublime and dissolute The entire poem is excellent, but I particularly like these lines... Shannon is a lucky lady! *S* |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
So enchantingly well done!! The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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raeann New Member
since 2009-06-24
Posts 2 |
This is really good it has a lot of emotion in it and it catches the reader really well.(something i can never do with my poetry its more of a blur of words)ha. Well done!! |
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