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WindWalker11
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0 posted 2009-02-05 11:48 AM


Tears in the wind
from life seen and tasted
in eternity
past the boundaries of earth
past the last signpost
of this universe,

I saw
(but what did I perceive?)

little
that I could understand
alone
walking this vale of storms
of tears
in restless winds
--time's Autumn
weighs heavily on my heart--

a tumble weed
blown about
shifting sands
dishevelled, naked, hungry
lifting scarred hands
to unsmiling copper skies
I cried to faded stars
out of my pain

"Tell Me Why?"
--I heard my voice carried off
in raucous laughter
the wind's laughter

then
through my tears in the wind
I caught a glimpse of love:
took a deep, deep breath,
made myself understand,
quieting my trembling soul.

Another storm has passed me by:
only now do I realize
your arms around my shoulders,
your gentle strength
holding me up, once more.

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secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
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1 posted 2009-02-05 12:46 PM


this 'write' is most fine! ...

I am especially fond of the ending:

"through my tears in the wind
I caught a glimpse of love:
took a deep, deep breath,
made myself understand,
quieting my trembling soul.

Another storm has passed me by:
only now do I realize
your arms around my shoulders,
your gentle strength
holding me up, once more."

v. serious and sustained applause for this 'penning'!!

Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2009-02-05 06:44 PM


Intense emoting, made me want to reach through this blue screen and give you a healing hug.
Then the ending...was a warm loving hug.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
3 posted 2009-02-05 06:54 PM


Powerful write, expressing humility. My favorite of yours.

Love,
Margherita

steavenr
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Posts 4058

4 posted 2009-02-06 12:18 PM


love your title...found this stanza simply amazing:

"a tumble weed
blown about
shifting sands
dishevelled, naked, hungry
lifting scarred hands
to unsmiling copper skies  <<--(that is such a cool phrase)
I cried to faded stars
out of my pain"

...it was all good

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
5 posted 2009-02-06 05:35 PM


"-time's Autumn weighs heavily upon my heart-"  My favorite line of this stunning poem. Somehow I always connect with your writing, WW.
                                 iDA

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
6 posted 2009-02-06 05:39 PM


WindWalker11 - like this poem, especially the last part. Very nice...

BC

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
7 posted 2009-02-08 11:52 AM


"Tears in the Wind" ~ The perfect title for a perfect poem!

"a tumble weed
blown about
shifting sands
dishevelled, naked, hungry
lifting scarred hands
to unsmiling copper skies
I cried to faded stars
out of my pain"

~ I hearya! I seeya! I feelya!

Thank goodness for loving arms that offer us a port in those storms.

Another fine write, WW


EA

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