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Juju
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since 2003-12-29
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In your dreams

0 posted 2009-02-05 12:01 PM


I'll miss the city

I am moving far away
I want to erase my self
And return to my old self
I need to make better friends

I wonder where my home is

Nothing is keeping me here
Some are not lucky like me.


-Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

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Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
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1 posted 2009-02-05 12:04 PM


Yo dear Juju,

You're not going anywhere Hon.  Don't go talking like that.

Love Bobby

Juju
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In your dreams
2 posted 2009-02-05 12:06 PM


Oh.... that's not a suicide poem... does it sound like a suicide poem? its not.

-Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.
3 posted 2009-02-05 12:11 PM


I am also moving.

To Winona... rural. And awesome.

Great write, I related strongly.

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

Robert E. Jordan
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Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
4 posted 2009-02-05 12:16 PM


You’ll both be lonely as hell.

No Juju, it doesn't sound like a suicide poem.

I can't stand being away from the city more than a few hours.

Bobby

Juju
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In your dreams
5 posted 2009-02-05 12:31 PM


You could be right.

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

gilead
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since 2008-03-10
Posts 1067
nevada, USA
6 posted 2009-02-05 12:50 PM


I like the thought this implies---fantasy or real, it is a dream to be so free, as if one is not bound to time and place, not so entrenched in a notion of self that can not changed.

Best wishes,

art

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
7 posted 2009-02-05 01:50 PM


there's no place like home, wherever that is

this country life of mine isn't really home...mine will always be the city by the beach

*hugs*

WTBAKELAR
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Utah, USA
8 posted 2009-02-05 02:15 PM


I miss the city.
I miss the smell of stale urine on the sidwalks,
I miss the filty streets and broken bottles,
I miss that little dead tree that somebody planted, trying to bring a little country to their lonely life,
I miss the sound of sirens going off every 7 minutes,
I miss the 2 cars that were stolen right from in front of my appartment.
(One of them I don't miss that much)
I miss the old guy that used to sleep around the corner buy the trash bin, He got knifed and died, (I didn't know his name, I wish I did)
I. . . . ya know, I really don't miss the city that much.

Enjoy lifes adventures, Have fun with your move.
WT.

gilead
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nevada, USA
9 posted 2009-02-05 02:42 PM


I left for college at 18, and moved a thousand mile away. I'm still on the move---discovery, adventure, renewal, and aging with reverence and grace.

I enjoy your poetry.

art

gilead
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since 2008-03-10
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nevada, USA
10 posted 2009-02-05 02:49 PM


I left for college at 18, and moved a thousand mile away. I'm still on the move---discovery, adventure, renewal, and aging with reverence and gratitude.

"I wonder where my home is" This line reminds me of an old cliche---"Home is where the heart resides."

I enjoy your poetry.

art

[This message has been edited by gilead (02-05-2009 05:41 PM).]

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
11 posted 2009-02-06 12:48 PM


Fine writing...James
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