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mein or meree thanhai
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0 posted 2009-02-04 04:36 PM





Birds spit out fire
Even rain burns skin
Bleeding heads embellishing road
Machine insects hunting naive
Weeping child on mother's grave
sharpen your ears,
pale vibrating and
mouthful soab
None now to speak for me...



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Jax Nova
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1 posted 2009-02-04 04:40 PM


Very interesting. This makes me think of a sci-fi/fantasy book!  I can already see a story forming in my head.
Sunshine
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2 posted 2009-02-04 04:55 PM


I'm not sure what soab means, but the gist of it all felt like war. Interesting write.

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Boshii2
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3 posted 2009-02-04 04:58 PM


man's inventions have no humanity ...the metal birds  ..the metal insects ... the chemical rain....
man's inventions have no humanity.
I will speak for  them .
You have spoken for them.
We will speak for them.


Dear dear Mein or meree thanhai.

ethome
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4 posted 2009-02-04 05:28 PM


Sad I'd say...
"None now to speak for me".....

How hatred leads to such heartache.....

Eric

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Gaia
5 posted 2009-02-04 07:23 PM


The imagery is painful, and all too real.
May they all find the path to Peace.

steavenr
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6 posted 2009-02-05 01:01 AM


you have described modern warfare painfully well...regrettably...and yet on a more cheerful note...welcome to PiP...will be looking for more
Juju
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7 posted 2009-02-05 01:22 AM


Nice

-Juju

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Who thinks really deep thoughts
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Sunshine
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8 posted 2009-02-05 05:16 PM


Thank you for letting me know that you mean to write "sob". Makes all the difference!


Margherita
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9 posted 2009-02-05 06:38 PM


Powerful take on that horrible situation!

I hope that the younger generations of both nations will see the folly of it all and overcome hate and plant peace.

Love,
Margherita

gilead
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10 posted 2009-02-05 09:19 PM


Powerful and poignant. This ongoing conflict almost empties the breast of hope, but a solution must be found. Blessed are the peacemakers.

art

mein or meree thanhai
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11 posted 2009-02-06 05:12 PM


thanks a lot for everyone who insire me here, my first poem.
my legs shivered when i post this here..., now  im more more confident, exited

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