Three interconnected poems - A dark world.

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Ewen
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since 2009-02-02

Posts 2

0 posted 2009-02-02 09:09 PM

Hi, very new to this but my first attempts below.. trying to deal with a deep sadness and dissapointment with the worlds way, through these poems, I'm having my say:

If I wanted to pay the price, commit the ultimate sacrifice.
For what would I die, what is my purpose and who gave that idiot a licence to surface?
Why are they able to laugh so loud, go home and to work, making everyone proud.
What is the reason they live this way, they have no idea or peception of the world's decay.
This isn't a poem, just a collection of thoughts,
the more I think, I keep drawing noughts.
Why live a lie, to die, with no reason why or an explanation how. I am over this life, over worrying whether people will be proud.
I feel I have true understanding of the real world, don't waste your time praying, my minds decay is already playing. The loopback button must be stuck, this day goes on & on. Can my existence provide any meaning? unlikely, I'm moving, can feel the next season, feel free to give me a nudge or reason.
My body feels like committing treason.

Its a sad site when the moon don't go down, all light seeming to drown,
when the tides go out, and the winds bear down.
Feels like I'm paying my dues, started hearin the blues.
Finish this cigarette, still looking for clues,
I'm going to town, Cause I aint goin to live like this no more,
gotta get rid of this frown, life's not a bore.
Gonna stick my head out and have a look around, check out the sight,
The storm is passing, from behind this endless night peeks a splinter of light.
I guess, I can stick it out, cause theres always stormy skies, just gotta keep your eyes on the prize,
I can see a warm glow coming, heading this way. I think tomorrow is going to be ok.

I have water yet am thirsty, I have food yet am starving,
I can see yet am blind, can touch yet am numb.
No hate, No love, look to the lights above,
give me a push, a reason, a way to fight this infection,
the world's imperfection, a diabolical conception,
"Why not just give it a go, son".

I guess on reflection poetry is excellent for dealing with emotion as I can't talk to people normally about my issues -- They are mine and not yours.

Finding some magnificent literature here -- Great insight into others lives, happiness and struggles.

Ewen - 27.

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (02-05-2009 03:46 PM).]

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2009-02-03 09:23 AM

Dear Ewen, welcome to Pip!

I think your first attempt to express your feelings is good and if it helps you to deal with your issues write on and trust in your improvement.

We have all been there no doubt, in those temporary deep blues and frustration. The fact that you are here and alive and expressing hope of better times coming is proof enough that there is a design for you, a purpose, a mission. It all depends on how you look at things. We must be aware always that the sun is there even behind the blackest clouds ...

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

2 posted 2009-02-05 02:10 AM

Welcome to PIP.....

Sometimes just writing thoughts out, gives you some release and helps you to gain knowledge of what you feel inside. Continue to write, we will read. latearrival.

Balladeer

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3 posted 2009-02-05 03:49 PM

Ewen, we welcome you to the site and thank you for sharing your thoughts with us.

You may notice that I removed something on the last line of your first stanza. Site guidelines prohibit either profanity or profanity masked with astericks. Please familiarize yourself with our rules to avoid any future misunderstandings.

We hope you enjoy your stay here

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (02-05-2009 09:06 PM).]

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2009-02-06 10:29 AM

Hi, Ewen! Welcome aboard the pip ship!

You have some fantastic lines in this poem!
Here are a few of my favs.

~ "The loopback button must be stuck, this day goes on & on."

~ "I have water yet am thirsty, I have food yet am starving,
I can see yet am blind, can touch yet am numb." ~ That is what often happens when our senses get over-loaded!

Writing poetry is a great way to pour out your soul, figuratively speaking!

Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug,
Earth Angel

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