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viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2009-02-02 09:45 AM



The snow felt
disturbed,
as we made
snow angels.
Mine, large.
Yours, small,
but so much
more wonderful.

The sky was
jealous
that it couldn't
sweep you into
it's large arms
and hold you.
Feel the steam
of your sweet
hot breath,
like I am.

So it began
to blow harder,
and snow much
more violently.
We didn't mind
like it thought
we might.

As a matter
of fact,
I think
it made our time
all the better.
Because when we
got back
to my apartment
we had the excuse
to share
our bodies
and their heat.

________________________________________________
We all know what series this actually belongs in.

(The Sadie Series.)

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

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Boshii2
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since 2009-02-01
Posts 146

1 posted 2009-02-02 11:15 AM


dear Vik
I saw snow angels being made in a movie only recently.It made a big impression.
Just like your poem.
I smiled at your last verse,thinking you have forgotten to be the poet now and have become the lover again.
It is very very good.

amusemi
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A State of Disarray
2 posted 2009-02-02 11:33 AM


You know VM...I think we all have a Sadie.  Wonderful write.
Margherita
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Eternity
3 posted 2009-02-02 11:36 AM


Snow is playful seduction here. Beautiful!

Love,
Margherita

viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
4 posted 2009-02-02 12:03 PM


Boshii... Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed the read.

Amusemi... Yeah, I reckon we all do. I'm chasing a dream, but sometimes dreams come true, right? Ha.

Margherita... Thank you ma'am. I like to think so!

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

amusemi
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A State of Disarray
5 posted 2009-02-02 05:32 PM


For you, kind sir, I hope they do!
viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
6 posted 2009-02-02 06:54 PM


Ha! Thank you very much, It'd be woon-da-bah!

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

Boshii2
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7 posted 2009-02-03 01:49 AM


today it is even better.
Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
8 posted 2009-02-03 08:41 AM


From one romantic snow-angel-maker to another, I can identify! ~ and the warm after-party can be so sublime!

A sweetly romantic piece of writing!


EA

viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
9 posted 2009-02-03 09:27 AM


Boshii... Thank you so much! I saw my response to your poem was edited by the moderators... :O I guess I really just liked it that much.

Earth Angel... Aw, thanks! You're a sweetheart.


-P


Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

Boshii2
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10 posted 2009-02-03 04:09 PM


smiles   yes but I got a print out of those comments before them moderators got to them !
  Actually I love you.  

viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.
11 posted 2009-02-03 04:33 PM


Haha...

If only I could say "I get that all the time."

Thanks Boshii.

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

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