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Open Poetry #44

A Desperate City

A Beautiful Disaster
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0 posted 2009-02-01 08:24 AM

Hello to you from the gray gloomy city,
Where crowds unconsciously worship despair,
Indulging in dangers of constant self-pity
With naive belief in the world's being fair.

They have no trust in a man's inner power,
And fortitude sounds like something unknown.
They have no poets, just ones of an hour,
Who drown at once in the thoughts of their own.

With greed they consume plain illusions for dinner,
And dress them with lies when they serve the new dishes
To those so-called "pathological sinners"
Who find someone else's delusions delicious.

They have Friday liter-mates rather than friends
To mark that the week of no favor is ending,
But even with glasses of spirits in hands
They look worse than misery. Are they pretending?

Suncleaver
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since 2009-01-18

Posts 481
Stafford England

1 posted 2009-02-01 02:40 PM

A very insightful read. Well written and pertinent to modern life in general.

Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told.

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

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2 posted 2009-02-01 03:03 PM

v. well done!

I especially like the beginning:

" ... the gray gloomy city,
Where crowds unconsciously worship despair,
Indulging in dangers of constant self-pity
With naive belief in the world's being fair(!)"

serious applause!!

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

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So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2009-02-01 03:34 PM

Yes, insightful is the word that I would use.
This poem strikes right to the heart of truth.
Ida

A Beautiful Disaster
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4 posted 2009-02-02 09:11 AM

Thanks a lot!

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2009-02-03 07:01 PM

Nice...James

steavenr
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6 posted 2009-02-03 09:29 PM

"They look worse than misery"

...powerful words, compelling write

A Beautiful Disaster
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7 posted 2009-02-04 12:44 PM

I'm glad you liked it.

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