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We Don’t Want to Stand In Your Way
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We Don’t Want to Stand In Your Way |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy 
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We Don’t Want to Stand In Your Way the grey spots in the yard attracted life that’s why they were dead. shadows cast by lonely suns melted upon the green hiding between blades except one solo shade alone and undisturbed, like a car without wheels cast by the young Adonis pumping a 5 pound weight like it was an Olympic tryout (his second day working out...shhh) Not double digit aged, he preened, squirmed, basking in his own sheen ruler thin with bones much larger than muscles until he asked the inevitable: Can you tell, now, if I'm bigger? I stood in his shadow or perhaps he stood in mine for just a minute. Not really knowing how to answer smiling I told the boy who wanted to be big Don't worry, son: you will never be smaller than you are today. 1/24/09 Jeff/ ShadowRider [This message has been edited by threadbear (01-31-2009 03:55 AM).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
He he good answer. Great work and such diplomacy in this intimate thought provoking poem. I loved reading this! Eric |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
Hey, thanx, Eric! The poem turned out better on paper than I had it written in my head... Wasn't sure if I could get it to work right. Thanx for the 'couragement! Jeff |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I just smile at mine and say yes honey...you look great.  and I still remember when it was my brother doing it |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
Sea, Thank you for taking the time to nibble on this poem. Don't know for sure, but perhaps 'weights' are a man's 'makeup.' (or boy's) |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I think it's tough for a young man the same as it is for a young girl, waiting to develope it's a transformation for both. |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
and you hit on exactly why the title of the poem is what it is. Encouragement and praise in the form of optimistic honesty is essential to developing self-esteem. Funny thing is, guys usually don't care about their appearance at all, until they discover girls that is! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This one left me smiling! *S* Time never seems to go fast enough for them, does it? Or slowly enough for us... but you've captured one moment perfectly. *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Smiling and nodding with understanding, as I read along but my smile almost cracked my face when I came to your brilliant closing lines! ~ "Don't worry, son: you will never be smaller than you are today."   Linda |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Enjoyed your wisdom. threadbear. Ida |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
I love your poem, I was smiling and laughing at the end |
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