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scorsese101
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since 2009-01-28
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0 posted 2009-01-29 07:04 PM


It hurt me so hard
to leave you on a visit

It hurt me so hard
to hear you crying on the fone

It hurt me so hard
When you thought we've replaced you

It hurt me so hard
to know your locked up like an animal

It hurt me so hard
to not be able to call you when i want

It hurt me so hard
to listen to that song we both listened to

But what hurts me the most
is to think about what you're doing, right before i sleep...
All alone, with only a countdown of the days that lays regnant in your mind.

I love you dad.

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Juju
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since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams
1 posted 2009-01-29 07:09 PM


sad

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
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Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
2 posted 2009-01-29 07:34 PM


Yo dear Scorsese101,

This is a very well written poem.  It brings back memeries for me from about sixty years ago when my Dad was locked up.

Keep on trucking Hon.

Love Bobby

scorsese101
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3 posted 2009-01-29 07:45 PM


Thanks your feedback is much appreciated,
i just write when the emotions are at their high...

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