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Of Ghosts and Dreams
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Of Ghosts and Dreams |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England 
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Far away you lie asleep under frozen northern skies Deep beneath a dreaming veil I know your body lies We can bridge the many miles as far as it may seem I feel your arms around my chest a spirit in my dreams Within this twilight reverie your sweet breath I can taste Your gentle eyes your pounding heart the smooth curve of your waist We lie in love this perfect trance two souls entwined as one And then like autumn mist you fade under the rising sun. A whispering voice upon the wind I hear you call my name Bear my heart away with you I know we'll meet again Dedicated to Shannon, my beloved. |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
Suncleaver I like your poem. I could feel every word, that fell upon the page. NICE  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I like you writing, Luke. Ida |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderfully projected reflection of emotions Luke. Eric |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This is quite lovely. I enjoyed it. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Suncleaver - a special write to someone missed... BC |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
While I greatly appreciate you all enjoying my poem, I am afraid (correct me if I'm wrong) that Bill may have got the wrong end of the stick. She's in Scotland, not passed away. Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Beautiful write! I hope you sent it to her. Maybe the ghost or the dream is more real than one would suppose. Enjoyed your expression very much. Helen |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
Thanks Honeybunch. I always send the ones dedicated to her to her. When I posted her the links she was absolutely overjoyed at the response the poems 'Of Ghosts and Dreams', 'Seraphic', 'The Crystal Rose' and 'Fathomless' recieved, so thanks very much guys. Love and smiles to all of you, from Luke. Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told. |
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Def-init Member
since 2008-12-03
Posts 186Toronto, Canada |
"A whispering voice upon the wind I hear you call my name Bear my heart away with you I know we'll meet again" Yeah man. I am feeling this. Inspirational indeed. I think I will post a poem here in the open forums for a change. With my dark past lets see what I can come up with. |
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Suncleaver Member
since 2009-01-18
Posts 481Stafford England |
Yeah Def, you should really try and uncover more sides to your character. Thank you for your comments on the poetry. Never sigh for a better world, it's already composed, played and told. |
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PrestonThePoet Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 87 |
your poems mix a feel of not neccesarily old poetry and new poetry, but a vast mixture of language, im only 18 so my writing style is unfortunately more punctual whereas, some people i feel use way too many big words, and it takes away fomr the simple feeling of a simple poem, but i feel that the way you write is right in the middle, which in my mind is just astonishing. i've read a couple of your poems and liked them all, this though is my favorite, keep up the work, and i hope i didnt confuse you with all that. Preston |
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