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viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.

0 posted 2009-01-27 12:15 PM


I bet it's wonderful
to hold you,
your hand in public.
Show you off to the world.

Must be grand,
seeing how your feminine
chest rises and falls,
in midnight passion.

I'd pay you,
in years of my life
to kiss those lips.


_________________________________
The Sadie Series.

I thought this one was actually a winner- I haven't been too pleased with my work since "The Netting Distance From Here To Mexico."


Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

© Copyright 2009 Paul Weisbrod - All Rights Reserved
ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2009-01-27 02:25 AM


Yes, pay is a good way to look at it.....

How is 'Sadie' pronounced?

I know what you mean, my wife told me she worshiped the ground I walked on. I found out what she meant when we split up...
"SHE GOT ALL MY PROPERTY!!

Good write!

Eric

amusemi
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2 posted 2009-01-27 02:52 AM


Very sweet and indeed a keeper.
viking_metal
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3 posted 2009-01-27 01:32 PM


Ethome- I was suggesting that I'd give her the rest of my hundred years... "Say-dee" Thanks!

Amusemi- Thank you much!


-P

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

Earth Angel
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4 posted 2009-01-27 02:31 PM


Greetings, Viking!

Now those must be quite a pair!!! ~ of lips, of course! lol

Cute poem from a cutie pie of a guy!


EA

viking_metal
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5 posted 2009-01-27 07:02 PM


Thank ye ma'am!

Yeah, she's something alright. I hope someday things work out. If not- I got a good series of poetry and a few good memories out of the ordeal!

-P

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

Boshii2
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6 posted 2009-02-04 03:07 PM


just daydreaming about the exchange rate..Aussie currency is way down .
Daydreaming abouut the poem too.
Boshii2.  Downunder.

Margherita
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7 posted 2009-02-04 03:12 PM


Original title for a very lovely piece of poetry, dear viking metal!

Very inspirational.

Love,
Margherita  

ps: I answered your questions about the two German words in my poem ...

passing shadows
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displaced
8 posted 2009-02-05 02:13 AM


this touched my heart

Klassy Lassy
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9 posted 2009-02-05 02:21 AM


What a smile this poem is!  Loved it...


Robert E. Jordan
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10 posted 2009-02-05 08:43 AM


Yo Paul,

You treat that girl right, and she'll treat you right.

Bobby

viking_metal
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11 posted 2009-02-05 09:22 AM


Boshii... Thanks darlin'. =]

Margherita... Thank you! Did you connect the last stanza with the title? I was hoping people would.

Passing shadows... Good.

Klassy Lassy... Fanksh very much.

Robbus McObbus... Yeah, I reckon she might. Sometimes it's that easy.

-P

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

Boshii2
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Posts 146

12 posted 2009-02-06 02:39 AM


The title is  the key to this poem .It is absolutely brilliant.Be confident that it is Vik,and dont explain it. Leave us wondering.
Hugs anyway.

viking_metal
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13 posted 2009-02-06 09:27 AM


Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

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14 posted 2009-05-16 01:44 AM


Your poetry opens up little pieces of you for us to peek inside you.  I like that about you.  I like your poetry too.

Ali-Outtatoon

Marcia MT
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15 posted 2009-05-16 04:55 PM


I love to read romantic poetry written by a man when it's written by a talent like yours. BRAVO!
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with you
16 posted 2009-05-16 05:35 PM


you wouldn't have to pay me
viking_metal
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17 posted 2009-05-16 07:51 PM


ala-hoonhoon... thank you ma'am. You're the bomb. And you know it.  

Marcia... You are far too kind. Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed yourself.

And my dear, dear SEA... I'd have no money left, I'd have spent all my money on a 12$ bottle of champagne already. I know a neat spot on the river here.  

Everyone deserves to be loved, even you.

Alison
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18 posted 2009-05-17 03:35 PM


I do?



I guess I do.  
You just told me.

Spuddette
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19 posted 2009-05-17 04:04 PM


Ahh i really like this. Good work
viking_metal
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In a Jeep, Minnesota.
20 posted 2009-05-22 12:23 PM


alashanoo- yes. you do.

New friend Spudette! Thank you very much.

Everyone deserves to be loved, even you.

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