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Open Poetry #44

sunset 2

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

0 posted 2009-01-25 10:23 AM

Clumsily.
the sun staggers
along the sea.

Maladroit.
le soleil trébuche
dans la mer.

[This message has been edited by 2islander2 (01-26-2009 10:18 AM).]

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2009-01-25 07:34 PM

Yo Yann,

Not too bad. Perhaps "Clumsily".

Bobby

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

2 posted 2009-01-26 01:00 AM

you make me smile with the sun's clumsiness lovely Yann...

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2009-01-26 11:17 AM

Smiling at your 'staggering' sun. Enjoyed.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

4 posted 2009-01-26 07:37 PM

This makes me smile too, yann. Sometimes the sun does appear to stagger.
Ida

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2009-02-03 04:35 AM

Like this one too, dear Yann. Yes, when it seems unstable because of the turbulences in the atmosphere.

Love,
Margherita

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