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Pilgrimage
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0 posted 2009-01-24 10:45 PM



Dark Lament

I would be away under protection of the night;
but I stay, in fear of stars.

It’s hot here, and the rats itch my outer skin.
They have taken to sharpening their teeth on me,
but I don’t move.

If I frighten them, they scurry about
and stir up the powder dust.
It reminds me, when I don’t sneeze,
and the panic grabs me again.

I would be away before the dawn,
but I have lost the measure of time
now I have no heart to beat my hours;

and I might be caught in sky-glare,
to my great detriment.

There are insects here, many-legged crawlers.
All my life I hated them,
and they taste no better now.

I would be away, but I remain.

Don’t laugh at me.
You don’t know what your tomorrows bring.

I didn’t.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

© Copyright 2009 Nancy Wilcox - All Rights Reserved
woodtic
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since 2002-01-06
Posts 87

1 posted 2009-01-25 03:16 AM


I once new a women, she was slowly dying in the worst kind of way. Every day she breathed, hope was in each exahlation, that the future might be better.

Crawl out from under, the rats still bite, but they run in the light.

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
2 posted 2009-01-25 05:25 AM


Yo dear Nan,

Nice to see you again.  This is an interesting poem, with an interesting outlook.

Look on the bright side, and you'll feel much better.  It's Sunday.

Stay away from those centipedes, they're not insects anyway.

Love Bobby

Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
3 posted 2009-01-25 10:43 AM


I am so happy your back for another postin'! I always enjoy your poems! They bring a new light to thoughts and visuals!


ARCTIC WIND

turtle
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since 2009-01-23
Posts 548
Harbor
4 posted 2009-01-25 02:30 PM


Hi pilgrimage,

I like a good riddle and this is one. I don't know what you are, inanimate, or more likely deceased I suspect. At first I thought you were jumping through time in error, but "I have lost the measure of time" tells me it is intentional. The last line confuses me, for all living things "tomorrow" can only bring death. This further enforces the thought that you may be referring to the grave.

Turtle

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
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Texas, USA
5 posted 2009-01-25 07:46 PM


You guys are the best

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
6 posted 2009-01-27 02:54 PM


This is ariddle to me too but an excellent one.
                              Ida

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
7 posted 2009-01-27 03:21 PM


Howdy, Pilgrim! Have you got a case of the creepy crawlies!

I've got to go back for another read through. I may not know what you're truly saying ~ but I like how you said it!!! lol

Good to see a post from you today!


Linda

vandana
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8 posted 2009-01-27 07:06 PM


enjoyed
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