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Honeybunch
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since 2001-12-29
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0 posted 2009-01-23 04:34 PM


To succeed at love one needs to be
a little bit here and a little bit there
and have the eyes of one who looks
left, right, up, down, around, within.

‘Tis a grand landscape that eyes behold
when the complete and utter picture
is made available
but the price beyond the common man
remains an obstacle
to the knowing and the owning
of the all that is.

I paid the price and in my heart  
hold now only the change
but heavy, oh, so heavy,
that change unseen but felt.

And so to beggars on the street
I wish to give it all away
but when the change comes
own it now and know it’s meant to be
a burden that is carried
till death begets relief.

No one can change and stay the same
though looks belie the fact
and no one can own another’s change
though I surely wish they would!

Helen / 23 January 2009


© Copyright 2009 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2009-01-23 07:15 PM


Helen, this feels to be an intense emotional purging of a some serious pain and suffering!
Sending peaceful wishes on winds of change.

Martie
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2 posted 2009-01-23 07:51 PM


Hello Helen...it's so good to see you!  This poem buried itself in me and I realized how familiar it was...thank you for writing it.  
Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
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highways, & byways, for now
3 posted 2009-01-23 08:24 PM


Honeybunch - each day brings forth the newness of it all, nice write...

BC

Namyh
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4 posted 2009-01-24 08:17 AM


Helen - Sometimes we wish the circumstances which produce the change would not happen. Yet, it does and we must indeed carry its burden to the grave. But it is believed also that growth is ordained for all life. And it usually starts after change. You captured a human essence with this one Helen. Enjoyed and Thanks. Namyh
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
5 posted 2009-01-24 12:02 PM


I agree, this poem brings forth hidden emotion!
Well lets hope a nice can cheer you up

to you Helen
ARCTIC WIND

Earth Angel
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6 posted 2009-01-25 08:51 PM


Oh, Honey, "a burden that is carried
till death begets relief."

~ Now that is one heavy burden.

Your words reached out and grabbed me by the solar plexus.

Giving you a warm and compassionate hug,
Linda

GothicCherry
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7 posted 2009-01-25 09:00 PM


"To succeed at love one needs to be
a little bit here and a little bit there
and have the eyes of one who looks
left, right, up, down, around, within."

Helen, I adored this stanza. Thankful for sharing such a touching poem.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
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8 posted 2009-01-25 11:57 PM


"To succeed at love one needs to be
a little bit here and a little bit there
and have the eyes of one who looks
left, right, up, down, around, within."

...and therein lies the burden...love is such a nebulous thing...to be able to describe it is as difficult as the effort to harness it...beautifully written...heartfelt expression of a timeless topic

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