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Bladecatcher
Junior Member
since 2008-11-25
Posts 15


0 posted 2009-01-20 05:01 AM


Dusky midnight colors strain through
cheap satin curtains. Their moonlight rays,

diluted but still beautiful,
illuminate a naked figure

on a twin mattress, providing light
yet witholding comfort.

The sojorn face rests
blanketed by a muted glow

like a thousand purple fireflies
placid expression softly

overcast by the thoughtfully muted embers
of their otherwise fiery cores

These serene features lay
untroubled by

the solidarity of day;
this night, the sleeper rests.


[This message has been edited by Bladecatcher (01-20-2009 05:56 AM).]

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Anniepimm
Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550
England
1 posted 2009-01-20 09:52 AM


Beautiful words excellently written
I loved this poem and the way you told the story

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
2 posted 2009-01-20 07:46 PM


..."providing light
yet witholding comfort"...

What a powerful verse!

Quite a write, and this really stood out on it's own.  

steavenr
Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

3 posted 2009-01-21 12:28 PM


nice to welcome you to PiP, and loved the vividness of the imagery in this write...a cinematic journey here...enjoyed
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