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Open Poetry #44

Mutiny

Bladecatcher
Junior Member

since 2008-11-25

Posts 15

0 posted 2009-01-19 11:49 PM

I still remember the day
you took all our
lives
in your hands
and wouldn't let go until
I said sorry

I still remember
that biting edge to your voice
I'd heard it before
but never so loud

I still remember that wide-eyed
evil desperation
the white-knuckled inertia
more scared than angry

I still remember
that you never said
sorry yourself

So I want you
to remember
that when I apologized
I lied

I declared mutiny

amusemi
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1262
A State of Disarray

1 posted 2009-01-20 12:28 PM

There was a time I could say that I deserved to be on the receiving end of your poem. People don't always see how in the wrong they are, often times until it is too late.

A smooth and powerful write, full of strong emotion and spunk. Well crafted and executed. Thank you for sharing it.

Namyh
Senior Member

since 2009-01-20

Posts 988

2 posted 2009-01-20 11:26 AM

Bladecatcher - This is a declaration of the divine defiance when disloyalty meets the mutiny in us, so well defined by your poetic work here. Thanks Bladecatcher. Namyh

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