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Burk28
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0 posted 2009-01-19 07:35 PM



Afterglow, end of day,
Dusk setting in mystery
Lamentation for waning eve
Where “Tomorrow” is but a dream

An ethereal what if wonderland
Filled with chorus of prairie wind song
Blowing about the corridors of my mind

Futuristic embolisms bursting forth
And revealing blood’s
Salty invigorations…

Peace of  mind can only be achieved when we find peace with self

© Copyright 2009 W.B. Burkholder - All Rights Reserved
r v wooo
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1 posted 2009-01-20 11:06 AM


this is very good! it gives me a pleasant feeling..."kinda like aqua velva for my soul".
Burk28
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2 posted 2009-01-20 01:36 PM


LOL aqua velva,,, thank s very much

Peace of  mind can only be achieved when we find peace with self

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2009-01-22 06:03 PM


Enjoyed...James
ethome
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4 posted 2009-01-22 06:08 PM


There's a lot of neat metaphors in this piece.

Eric

steavenr
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5 posted 2009-01-22 10:39 PM


Beautiful write...especially loved this line:

"Futuristic embolisms bursting forth"

powerful images created here...

Burk28
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6 posted 2009-01-23 02:10 AM


Steavenr thanks very much

Peace of  mind can only be achieved when we find peace with self

Burk28
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7 posted 2009-01-23 02:10 AM


James and ethome, thank you

Peace of  mind can only be achieved when we find peace with self

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