Open Poetry #44 |
Cold Awakening |
icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
It is snowing, wishful brittle flakes shattering on impact, much as whispered dreams, fragile drift imaginings spun from sugared memories, shattering on touch, reality overwhelming realization. ©2009 by icebox . |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
This has excellent flow. Very impressed! I like the short poems they can be very strait to the point without loosing anything |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
superb!! loud and long-sustained applause for this finely succinct and most effective 'penning'! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
icebox - ah yes, snowing it still is. Wonderfully beautiful and gracious are the firs in white... BC |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A soft approach to reality's mirror. Beautifully rendered. Love, Margherita ps love the new smile too! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
cold hands warm heart |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Where have you been Mr. Ice? This was sure worth waiting for. Ida |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
very cool, cool kat |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Good morning, dear Box of Ice. The lyrics "Let it snow. Let it snow. Let it snow." just came to mind. ..."whispered dreams, fragile drift imaginings spun from sugared memories," Gosh, yer good! Sending an extra warm hug from the frozen north, EA |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Gosh, it's good to read you, Mr. C. and I really like this. Reality bits! But....then again, what is really reality?! *hugs*.....jo |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
most of the good adjectives have probably already been used for this...it is just so good, but I loved the word flow in this: "wishful brittle flakes" ...almost needs a new word for it--wishrittlakes--put that in your spell checker and clog it... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Excellent! |
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