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Open Poetry #44

Crushed

LoneWolf
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 384
IL

0 posted 2009-01-13 01:26 AM

“Crushed”
Diamond hearts crumble
Upon the suns crimson rise
As hollow eyes turn
Upon the empty sheets beside
The memories return

It's too bad I'm not as wonderful a person as people say I am, because the world could use a few people like that.

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

1 posted 2009-01-13 05:05 AM

Beautiful words,
I love the short poems, you can make such an impact with so very little words

Well penned..

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

2 posted 2009-01-13 06:18 PM

"Diamond hearts crumble"

how come I didn't come up with that?

The only time we waste is the time we spend thinking we are alone.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2009-01-13 06:27 PM

~ oh, the ache of this write.
~ oh, the poetic beauty of this write.

May your sunsets and sunrises
sparkle like diamonds! ~ and not crushed ones!

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

4 posted 2009-01-13 08:26 PM

Yo LoneWolf,

This is nicely done.

Sometimes memories are all we're left with. They can make good company.

Bobby

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

5 posted 2009-01-13 11:37 PM

LoneWolf - I have to agree, at times a short poem says a whole lot, such as this one...

BC

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

6 posted 2009-01-14 02:56 AM

Those memories can be so painful as this short but excellent poem brings out.

Eric

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