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r v wooo
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0 posted 2009-01-12 12:13 PM



                      2810

I punched the numbers
on my cell
to find relief
from a lonely spell.

Calling from a place of darkness,cold and damp
buried within a memory of hope and chance
where a friendship awaits,
unforgotten!

If only there be an answer,
I said to self,
as the phone rang
and rang.

"Twenty-eight ten...
sorry, I'm unavailable at this time
but, if you leave your name and number,
I'll call back as soon as I can!"



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Anniepimm
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1 posted 2009-01-12 02:01 PM


Awww this really has a very sad connotation
The anticipation of hope dashed as there is no answer excellently written my friend
I liked it very much

This stanza for some reason resonates with me

""Calling from a place of darkness,cold and damp
buried within a memory of hope and chance
where a friendship awaits,""
unforgotten!

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2 posted 2009-01-13 08:51 PM


And they nevvverrrr do, do they?

Thanks for this quirky little ride on the Poetry Express! I'm reaching out to find new ways right now, to put more life into my own verse....poems like this will help me stretch in new directions.

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Bill Charles
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3 posted 2009-01-13 11:34 PM


r v wooo - those 'I'll call you back', h'mmmm, don't like them at all. Nice write about it...

BC

ethome
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4 posted 2009-01-14 02:58 AM


It seems that a person gets those recordings when you don't need them the most.....Just me I guess....Nice writing.

Eric

Margherita
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5 posted 2009-01-14 05:46 AM


You have rendered the expectation of some warmth so very well here.

Love,
Margherita

Earth Angel
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6 posted 2009-01-15 10:20 AM


I hear ya! I know what that can be like!

Give me a call at 777-heaven and I promise that I will answer!


EA

r v wooo
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7 posted 2009-01-15 11:45 PM


thank you all for the comments.
sarah 45
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8 posted 2009-01-16 11:05 AM


such a beautifl way of writing ,real sad but beautiful ......thanx 4 sharin' it.
r v wooo
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9 posted 2009-01-18 02:03 AM


sarah, thanks for stopping by...appreciate your comments.
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