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A Few Beads For Manhattan
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A Few Beads For Manhattan |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy 
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It stings when you’re lonely The cornucopia of gifts must be beyond remembering a rewind of zeal, love trinkets and blankets a cluttered attic where dust anoints the forgotten. Some cannot be erased stealing attention like a perpetual video playing a favorite book the first bike a first lip pressing (even if it was only an experiment.) Then there were the gifts of love delivered in emotional fits pinioned somewhere between tides in scripted sands that cannot stay and fickle sun days that call like sirens. One by one they are beseeched and removed from mental wallets - bent bills proffered with a degree of guilt and longing. It is best to look at them once in a while peer into them with deep reflection but most importantly to: spend them wisely 1/1/09 [This message has been edited by threadbear (01-10-2009 03:16 AM).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
TB~ 'fickle sun days that call like sirens' What an original thought~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Yep, important to look into them once in awhile. I love these words.... "Then there were the gifts of love delivered in emotional fits pinioned somewhere between tides in scripted sands that cannot stay" Now, that's poetry! Eric |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Lovely, nostalgic poem, Threadbear. I like your style. Ida |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Like Ida says (except) I've always loved your style, Jeff. M |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i liked your wallets here and the metaphorically ponderings |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
As I began to key a reply, I found myself about to quote practically every line! So I have opted to simply state that I AM quoting your poem in its entirety ~ for each line bears repeating!  A Few Beads For Manhattan It stings when you’re lonely The cornucopia of gifts must be beyond remembering a rewind of zeal, love trinkets and blankets a cluttered attic where dust anoints the forgotten. Some cannot be erased stealing attention like a perpetual video playing a favorite book the first bike a first lip pressing (even if it was only an experiment.) Then there were the gifts of love delivered in emotional fits pinioned somewhere between tides in scripted sands that cannot stay and fickle sun days that call like sirens. One by one they are beseeched and removed from mental wallets - bent bills proffered with a degree of guilt and longing. It is best to look at them once in a while peer into them with deep reflection but most importantly to: spend them wisely A  to be sure!!!Love & Light, EA |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
I feel honored and blessed to have fellow poets like you all here. Life is good, and I thank you so much! Jeff |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is very poignant and beautifully written, dear threadbear! It is amazing how objects project such intense emotions and memories. Love, Margherita |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
"...pinioned somewhere between tides in scripted sands that cannot stay..." Yep, erasable but not forgotten. Lovely! |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
Jeff, I usually tend to like the poetry that rhymes(poems)more than the freeform style, however, every now and then one comes along that catches me by surprize, and I can't help but read it again and again, (thanks EA) This is one of those of which I speak. Very nice. I will read again and enjoy. Thanks for the write. WT. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
threadbear - I believe this is the first poem of yours I've read. This is excellent, and I will be reading many more... BC |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Superbly written. I enjoyed the content, uniqueness, lack of clichés, and the art, aesthetics and excellence of your writing immensely. I looked deep into the coloured glass swirls of each bead and spent each wisely. Thank you for such pleasure! Owl |
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