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Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California

0 posted 2009-01-09 05:47 AM


My brother and I
at about nine and ten,
along with a couple
of adventurous friends,
took a magic carpet ride
on a cold, winter day
when it was snowing outside.
We dragged that big, cardboard box
all the way up the hill,
a hill about 200 feet high.
And as silent, white snowflakes
fluttered down from the sky,
we all climbed on board to take a ride.
It was quite a ride, I must say
for as soon as we got under way
that cardboard box left the ground
and I swear it took flight.
It must have been a fantastic sight
and a feeling I've remembered since.
I've always thought we'd be flying still
if it hadn't been for that chain link fence.

                                 Ida Werrett

© Copyright 2009 Ida Werrett - All Rights Reserved
Anniepimm
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since 2008-12-26
Posts 550
England
1 posted 2009-01-09 06:25 AM


Thoughtful poem..
Beautifully written i was drawn into this piece and it set my mind off with so many thoughts

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
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by the sea
2 posted 2009-01-09 07:07 AM


thank you Ida for the enjoyable memories and poem, You make me think that past is precious and thoughtful and that we have to look at it....It is a great source of inspiration...

have a nice day

yann

1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
3 posted 2009-01-09 10:44 AM


i love this ida

Earth Angel
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4 posted 2009-01-09 10:55 AM


Oh, oh! That chain-link fence was an abrupt and unceremonious ending to what started out as a magic carpet ride down from a snowy hilltop on a beautiful winter's day!

Glad you lived to tell the story, dear Ida!

Love you and the 'kodak snapshots' you so descriptively write of your life!

Linda

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
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Ohio
5 posted 2009-01-09 11:03 AM


thank you for the light of heart flight of childhood eternal
Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
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Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
6 posted 2009-01-09 12:59 PM


Yo dear Ida,

I have one thing to say about your adventure--

OUCH!

Love Bobby

Paul Wilson
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7 posted 2009-01-09 01:19 PM


Ida...Great story. Brought a chuckle to me on a day when I really needed it. Thanks...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
8 posted 2009-01-09 01:30 PM


Yes, I remember lying on the ground, looking
up at the grey sky with snowflakes falling on my face and thinking...OUCH!
                                    Ida

[This message has been edited by Marchmadness (01-09-2009 02:10 PM).]

vandana
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9 posted 2009-01-09 05:50 PM


nice
OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
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Durban, South Africa
10 posted 2009-01-10 08:12 AM


Ida, this was delightful, except for the ouchy ending (not to the poem, but to the experience!)!  

Isn't life interesting and so like your poem?  It is important to remember both the WOW and the OUCH, the rides and the price of the tickets, the elation and the stumbling blocks - or rather fences!  They both make up what is us.  

Owl

Oklahoma Rose
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since 2008-02-28
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Oklahoma USA
11 posted 2009-01-10 09:59 AM


Oh my gosh! I bet that is a ride you would remember. But, it was fun while it lasted , huh. Your poems are always a joy to read.
Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
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highways, & byways, for now
12 posted 2009-01-10 01:35 PM


Ida - this brought back so many good memories. Yes, we did the same with a big cardboard box and came down that hill what seemed like 50 miles an hour. Wow, what a ride I remember...

BC

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
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13 posted 2009-01-10 03:43 PM


did that once in a car...'cept my fence was barbed wire...still hear the noise of the scratching across the windows...that's what came to my mind while reading your write...excellent stirring of the memories...
Margherita
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14 posted 2009-01-11 05:05 PM


I just could hear all the screaming of joy and excitement, while you were airborne! ... well the fence probably had a protective function after all.

I want to go sledding!

I adored that. Thank you for the memories through your delightful poem.

Love,
Margherita

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
15 posted 2009-01-13 12:51 PM


Enjoyed reading this...James
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