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steavenr
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0 posted 2009-01-08 12:08 PM


When the road turns so sharply
that it seems it ends
When the pathway turns
hiding its cruel bends
Don't stand by the roadside hitching
Don't scratch the itch that's itching

When the pool of love seems so deep
that it's stillness hides beneath its charm
When the waters rest to a seeming calm
its reflections many are cause for alarm
Don't go in where the water's deep
Don't let life's demons your soft-soul keep

And say to yourself through all your trials
I can surely go on for miles and miles
I'll swim to the other shore away  from the past
'Til I learn to love myself at last

© Copyright 2009 Steaven R Snow - All Rights Reserved
Marc-Andre
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1 posted 2009-01-08 01:11 PM


Well-written and interesting. Mark
Burk28
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2 posted 2009-01-08 02:27 PM


yes yes yes, the rhythm here is superb.
a masterful job at this piece of art, well done bravo

Peace of  mind can only be achieved when we find peace with self

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2009-01-08 09:14 PM


Keep the best and let go of the rest!

May 2009 be one of joyful, new beginnings!


Linda

Robert E. Jordan
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4 posted 2009-01-08 09:49 PM


Yo Steavenr,

There's really no need to go through much rig-a-marrow, love yourself right now, even if no one else will.  You're the important one in that respect.

Nice poem well done Babe.

Bobby

ethome
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5 posted 2009-01-09 12:17 PM


Good positive message!

There's always sunshine after rain!

Well done!

Eric

steavenr
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6 posted 2009-01-09 01:44 AM


Marc,
Thank you kindly for your very generous comments.

Burk,
Good to have you with us...thanks for your very nice comments...will look forward to seeing some of your work.

Linda,
pithy AND insightful...thanks for reading and commenting...thank you for your wishes

Bobby,
I totally agree, however this was written to someone that life had put through the ringer.  Lest anyone think this was written to be a guide to success, let's just say it's more like a 'what-do-I-do now' recipe for 'lemonade' from life's lemons.

Oh, the Babe comment...I guess I'm sensitive to that only because others here (I guess for the spelling of my name--who knows) have thought that I am female.  For the sake of clarity, I am a guy...just in case someone would think otherwise. No big deal, but just feel I need the record to be clear (and so I don't get called poetess again.)   Thank you for reading and commenting.  I DO appreciate it.

Eric,
Thank you...call me a Pollyanna...I just love positive messages...glad you stopped by.

ThisDiamond
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7 posted 2009-01-11 01:27 PM


I read this as quite personal, a message to a particular sweet shadow.  Join you in sentiment, and appreciate the positive message.  
Earth Angel
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8 posted 2009-01-11 03:06 PM


Steave, I couldn't help but chuckle at BJ's "Babe" comment. Steave, I believe that the spelling of your name might be somewhat confusing to some of your readers ~ I know it was to me at first. However, it became quite apparent to me that you are a guy and not a gal! lol


Linda

Margherita
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9 posted 2009-01-11 03:49 PM


Very beautiful and wise, dear Steaven. I do not doubt that it was taken to heart.

Love,
Margherita

Bill Charles
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10 posted 2009-01-11 07:20 PM


steavenr - love ones self first before one can love another. Many messages, good ones, in this writing...

BC

steavenr
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11 posted 2009-01-11 10:24 PM


TD,
you are not only wise but insightful as well...you have looked and seen the soul of this write...thank you for your illuminating response

Linda,
...all smiles...I guess I am way too touchy, but I just don't how else to let folks know (that I am a guy) than by just saying so...just so you know, I recently found my named spelled the way I spell it referring to a 1666 event AND it was a record of descendants from the Mayflower...and all this time I have accepted my inheritance of being on the shore waiting...now I will have to entertain the notion that Mom's side was waiting on Dad to arrive

Margherita,
you are right...I know that it was (and if you know who it was, the request is for more prayer)...thank you for reading and certainly for commenting...all involved say 'thank you'

Bill,
thank you...every day I deal with people I find that most with the greatest problems have not learned to do one of two things...1, to forgive themselves, and 2, to accept and love themselves...

Richy
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12 posted 2009-01-12 06:33 PM



Wow, loving thyself, now that's harder than it seems isn't it, at least for me it always has been. I guess every now and then, I kinda like myself though... kinda.

Hey Steven this one hit me like a ton of rocks.

Oh and hey, Like Kojak would always say,
"Who loves you baby."





inkedgoddess
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13 posted 2009-01-12 07:21 PM


and when you discover that , it all makes sense.........
glad you had the revelation and celebration

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