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Bathroom Floor |
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SlowlyFallAway Member
since 2008-08-29
Posts 279North Carolina |
I sit alone On the bathroom floor His words still ringing "I want more" Its become my home The bathroom floor The only place I can't ignore The smell of liquor The stench of war Right where I sit On the bathroom floor I can't get up Ill die right here But I don't mind Cause I'm just too scared I hear him knock On the bathroom door It hurts my ears I'm sick and sore I close my eyes I hear a song I see bright lights And then I'm gone. January 7th 2009 Emily Shives |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Emily - this is very sad, but I feel you reaching out. Wish you well, and I hope things become better for you... BC |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Emily, You summed up a place that I once was. It's one of those places that I never want to return to. Good job in putting the fear into words. Alison |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Touching, vivid, powerful. I'm impressed. Mark |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Emily You have presented a very vivid but sad picture in this piece. A situation that makes the reader want justice for the writer of those thoughts...... Very very good. Eric |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang! You got me like hitting the nail on the head here! |
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Nikki Thorman New Member
since 2009-01-08
Posts 7South Australia |
Emily, I like your poem the words are really stronge and reading i felt as though you were painting a picture in my mind. P.S "I like the way it flows". take care xx |
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Marc-Andre Senior Member
since 2008-12-07
Posts 501 |
Yep, Emily, I just had to come back and read it again. This has got to be one of my favourites on these boards. Mark |
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SlowlyFallAway Member
since 2008-08-29
Posts 279North Carolina |
Thank you for all the comments. These poems I write are my release, I was never good at verbally expressing myself. Writing is my remedy, thank you all for the support |
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