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Abe
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0 posted 2009-01-01 11:21 AM



A Blues Song

What is a blues song?
What does it have to say?
Is it about some sad things?
Or. about a gloomy, rainy day?

Who does it have to touch?
How should it make you feel?
Should it be far-fetched?
Or about, something real?

Should the words bring a tear?
Or, should they make you smile?
Or maybe, just tap your foot
For just a little while?

How should it be played?
Should it be soft and low?
Maybe with a simple tune
You think, you already know.

I could write a blues song
But, doubt that it would sell
Unless there is a record store
Down in the depths of Hell!


Del "Abe" Jones
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1 posted 2009-01-01 07:22 PM


Abe,

Probably each of us who read your poem will answer your questions differently, but I sincerly doubt that your blues song would be written in hell.  I think you write the poetic blues very well.

Happy New Year.

Alison

ethome
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2 posted 2009-01-02 07:58 PM


Well Abe I'm not trying to steal your post but being a songwriter this is how I would put a blues song together....

I love the questions you ask........

Blues Don't Forget (blues song)

                 Gonna sit right here
                 by this firelight.
                 Watch the shadows climb the wall
                 try to get through the night.
                 Open another bottle
                 and refill my glass
                 and wish you were here
                 with the love you said would last.

                 Now everybody gets down and blue
                 but me I'm slowly dying thinkin bout you......

                 I know you left me
                 but you're not gone yet
                 you're still right here
                 where these blues don't forget

                 I wanna call out your name
                 and talk bout our love
                 wanna ease all the trouble
                 between the two of us
                 But I know you can't hear me
                 cause you left like the wind
                 so I'm sittin here hurtin
                 wishin you'd come back again

                 I'll stare at the ceiling and cry at the walls
                 and swim through these feelings till a dead sleep calls...

                 I know you left me
                 but you're not gone yet
                 you're still right here
                 where these blues don't forget.

                 bridge:
                 I'll talk to your picture
                 and hope I hear your voice
                 But I'll just answer myself
                 cause I ain't got no choice

                 I know you left me
                 but you're not gone yet
                 you're still right here
                 where these blues don't forget.........

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