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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
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0 posted 2008-12-31 10:54 AM


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Each year
Is a brief affair

She stands
At the door
For one last time
Her long wool coat
Now buttoned up
Against
The cold outside

There are
Occasions
Such as these
When only the eyes
Can speak for hearts
The final glance a gaze

Adieu my love
As you disappear
Forget-me-nots
In your hair


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suthern
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1 posted 2008-12-31 11:22 AM


When only the eyes
Can speak for hearts
The final glance a gaze

It's been almost *why number the months when it seems like forever* since my last such gaze-that-says-everything. *sigh* I hope your wait isn't nearly as long!

I love this soft, romantic write!

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
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by the sea
2 posted 2008-12-31 11:45 AM


beautiful metaphor, years and girls, must think about it...May be some crush could happen with 2009.

Thank you for the poem.

yann

secondhanddreampoet
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3 posted 2008-12-31 03:11 PM


Excellent 'penning'!

I am especially fond of the ending:

"There are
Occasions
Such as these
When only the eyes
Can speak for hearts
The final glance a gaze

Adieu my love
As you disappear
Forget-me-nots
In your hair"

Grand impressionistic Romanticism!

MUCH applause!!

Bill Charles
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4 posted 2008-12-31 05:03 PM


Huan Yi - enjoyed your writing...

BC

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5 posted 2009-01-01 07:03 PM


Your poetry touches me with regrets.

A

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2009-01-05 05:08 PM


Enjoyed...James
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