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Open Poetry #44

Beautiful Cruel ocean

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

0 posted 2008-12-28 06:36 AM

Beautiful Cruel ocean

Standing alone in the wind of the ocean
The screeching of the birds is all i hear
The pounding of my heart rings out
Because the sea has the one i hold dear,

Why is the ocean so beautiful yet cruel?
Haven't you taken enough souls over the years?
Why take the only thing, “I love“?
I know it falls on deaf ears,

Beautiful ocean, wild and deep
I am empty, while you, just move on
I am left with my memories, of the one you took
Now the love of my life has, gone.

Annie 27-8-2008

amusemi
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since 2001-12-08

Posts 1262
A State of Disarray

1 posted 2008-12-28 06:45 AM

I am so sorry for your loss. For a brief time I was a Navy wife and I remember the worry every time he went out to sea. My heart goes out to you. Very well expressed in this poem.

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

2 posted 2008-12-28 06:47 AM

Thank you
And thank you for your kind words
You have a beautiful soul

Annie

Markus
Junior Member

since 2008-12-19

Posts 22

3 posted 2008-12-28 09:37 PM

very strong poem

YoungatHeart2
Member

since 2008-12-12

Posts 81

4 posted 2008-12-29 10:50 PM

Oh, Annie. What a heart-felt poem. I, too, am sorry for your loss and the sadness you must feel.

rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

5 posted 2008-12-30 02:18 AM

Wow this is so beautifully powerful! I love the ocean and it hits a different emotional level for me because having grown up around the ocean -I'm aware of how much power it has and I just am more emotionally connected to poems about the ocean. This was really well written! I'm sorry you had to go through that! Losing someone you love - there's no paralell for the pain and the loss. I'm truly sorry!
Beautiful writing though!
Rhia

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2008-12-30 02:38 AM

I imagine many a sailor's wife or loved one could truly feel this one in their heart, I know I did.

Love,
Mysteria

Anniepimm
Senior Member

since 2008-12-26

Posts 550
England

7 posted 2008-12-30 06:57 AM

Thanks every one for such wonderful comments

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