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Master
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0 posted 1999-09-27 11:16 PM


Forgive me Love, I'm truly sorry
Meaningless dreams form in my head
Love plays a role in this wonderful story
Mythical hero without a mission ahead
Love’s open eyes in me find appealing
Uniqueness of faith and likeness of feeling


[This message has been edited by Master (edited 09-29-1999).]

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Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap
1 posted 1999-09-27 11:51 PM


Intersting format ... I like it!

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")


Systematic Decay
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That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
2 posted 1999-09-28 12:14 PM


I agree with Nocht, the format is interesting, and I liked it too. Theres good imagery in this too, but I think you just left it at that, imagery. Its like an unfinished sentence, a subject without an action. Maybe I am missing something....could you perhaps enlighten me a bit?

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Master
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3 posted 1999-09-29 07:47 PM


nah.. you're right, I'm not too impressed with this one myself. I just like that line a lot and I wanted to try this style, turned out kind of hard.
Artic Wind
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4 posted 2007-11-13 07:44 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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