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Slim Shady
Junior Member
since 1999-08-03
Posts 32
Phoenix, AZ, USA

0 posted 1999-08-05 10:21 PM


It seems it's been an eternity,
As I wait around for you.
Hoping for you to change your mind,
And see that my heart is true.
If I heard those words,
My heart would skip a beat.
For I love you with all my heart,
because you make my world complete.
But why the hell can't you open your eyes,
And see what we could be?
I wonder what's in our future,
But this only God can see.
My love for you grows day by day,
And I'll always need you in my life,
For you I would take a bullet,
Or a fatal stab with a knife.
So as I sit and wait,
My heart will ache for you,
And until my very last breath,
My love will always be true.



[This message has been edited by rcarnell (edited 08-11-99).]

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doritos
Junior Member
since 1999-07-31
Posts 21

1 posted 1999-08-07 05:38 AM


1st poem's great 2nd poem's great too!
Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551
Pennsylvania
2 posted 1999-08-07 02:32 PM


Ah, this poem is so sweet. You really have great talent, keep them coming.

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People who throw kisses are hopelessly lazy.
-Bob Hope


ShellBelle
Junior Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 11

3 posted 1999-08-09 09:36 PM


LOL! Words of wisdom through and through!
I have a poem somewhat like your second. I don't think I could post it though. MAD PROPS!

Starr_Scott
Junior Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 26
Brownwood, Texas, USA
4 posted 1999-08-10 04:50 PM


I LOVE IT! This is a great poem and i know exactly how the person in this poem feels.
It's torture trying to get the person you like to open their eyes and see your the one for them. But as you said only time can tell if we are meant to be!
Great poem and keep them coming.
STARR



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[This message has been edited by Starr_Scott (edited 08-10-99).]

Slim Shady
Junior Member
since 1999-08-03
Posts 32
Phoenix, AZ, USA
5 posted 1999-08-11 12:06 PM


thank you all so much for the comments!



[This message has been edited by rcarnell (edited 08-11-99).]

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