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CrAyZeD
Junior Member
since 1999-08-03
Posts 45


0 posted 1999-08-04 09:36 PM


How come every good girl is taken,
but when their free I'm not?
How come I dream of her, but she doesn't dream of me?
Why is it when she looks at me my soul feels free?
My eyes tight shut and her words captivate me!
Why doesn't she feel that for me?
Why doesn't she reach for me? I'm so close yet so far.
Why doesn't she see she was ment for me.

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Jenn
New Member
since 1999-08-04
Posts 8
Clay,New York United States
1 posted 1999-08-04 10:06 PM


i love your peom. It is very true, and i totally agree.

Jenn




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Misty
Member
since 1999-08-01
Posts 121
USA
2 posted 1999-08-04 10:49 PM


Can i just say one thing, you need a better title, not that your title is bad it's just, this is such a great poem, i think it's good, but it needs a title like the poem/ mainly don't use slang in a title that much, because your poem is ful of feeling and sux's isn't a great word for this poem! but i love ther poem! Don't change it, unless you agree!


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