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Mike1sacks
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since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa

0 posted 1999-07-26 02:58 AM


she entered my life with a beat of my heart
now im shattered as we brake apart
my mind so clear myhead so dull
as thoughts of death cross through my skull

they say there are millions of fish in the sea
but she was my cathc special for me
i can have so much more wenever i need
so y split my wrists and watch my slef bleed?

memories of u run through my mind
but of good ones i still can not find
first i see u
then i see mud
then i see my bodie swamped in blood

ppl say the end is farther then near
but i see the end its right over here
many ppl remember a smile on my face
but now htey say "depression has taken over its plase"

now death will come and i will die
all depending on how my bodie lie
deaht will hopefully come by tommorow
so life can end in pittiful sorrow

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Mike1sacks
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since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa
1 posted 1999-07-26 02:59 AM


i won $10,000 for this 1

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Princess Lily
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since 1999-07-13
Posts 149
USA
2 posted 1999-07-29 01:16 AM


Yet another poem of yours that I absolutely love to pieces.Congrats on the 10thou.

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We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe

*A rose is a rose it withers and dies...so long as you keep it the memories stay alive*


Mike1sacks
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since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa
3 posted 1999-07-30 02:04 AM


to see if thats considered anoyin u
Mike1sacks
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since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
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4 posted 1999-07-30 01:35 PM


3
*~*butterfly*~*
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since 1999-07-26
Posts 28
minnesota
5 posted 1999-07-31 01:02 AM


nice work i really like this one, the best ive read of your work. really deep and sad, i can relate to some parts. keep it up!!
*later*
~kas~

Mike1sacks
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since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa
6 posted 1999-08-02 08:35 PM


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Black Rain
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since 1999-07-19
Posts 60
California, USA
7 posted 1999-08-02 11:09 PM


This is soooo sad, but wonderful. It deserved the 10,000 in my opinion, definately one of the best poems i've read in a long time. But then again, all of your poems catch my attention and all of those girls don't know what they are missing. keep posting so i can read them.
black rain

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"I'm just a girl...standing in front of a boy...asking him to love her." - Notting Hill



Slim Shady
Junior Member
since 1999-08-03
Posts 32
Phoenix, AZ, USA
8 posted 1999-08-03 10:57 PM


That was the most moving thing I have ever read.

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"That's Rock Bottom
When this life makes you mad enough to kill...
That's Rock Bottom
When you want something bad enough you'll steal...
That's Rock Bottom
When you feel you have had it up to here
Cause you mad enough to scream but you sad enough to tear"

Words by the Slim Shady


ILoveJ
Junior Member
since 1999-07-18
Posts 16
Eugene, Or, US
9 posted 1999-08-03 11:14 PM


It sounds as if you poured all yourself into it. I think you have written the most beatiful poem I have and will ever read. Thank you so much for writing this, it really is great. Is this poem make believe or true?
Mike1sacks
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since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa
10 posted 1999-08-03 11:19 PM


true
Mike1sacks
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since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa
11 posted 1999-08-06 04:19 PM


1
Starr_Scott
Junior Member
since 1999-08-06
Posts 26
Brownwood, Texas, USA
12 posted 1999-08-06 05:12 PM


I don't know about this one.
Kinda depressing
What's up with slitting the wrist thing?
I mean come on you erally willing to give up your life because you can't have some girl?
Just my opinion but it was a good poem just liven it up.
Keep it up.
Starr

Mike1sacks
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since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa
13 posted 1999-08-11 04:54 AM


seth/
The Mike Sacks
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since 1999-08-29
Posts 129
brooklyn ny
14 posted 1999-09-02 02:06 PM


1
CrAyZeD
Junior Member
since 1999-08-03
Posts 45

15 posted 1999-09-03 10:15 PM


Dont tell me that your the infamous Seth from brooklyn.
The one who tags up everywhere.
If thats you then small world.

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Dont bet your money on fast horses, bet your money on slow rabits.

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