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Mike1sacks
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since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa

0 posted 1999-07-24 04:52 AM


i sit at home wondering what to do
looking out the window thinking of you
There is one secret to u I've never told
who i wanna be with, live and grow old
well maybe not the only secet,there were another few
and that person i want to be with, is no other than you
but ppl like me, we never seem to have a chance
we're the one's always dateless,no1 for the dance
Every 1 call me a playa,though i got no1 to play
im just looking for love,every single day
but then again wen u look like me,there will neva be a time
that i can get the girl i want,take her to be mine
you are the 1 i luv,in a truthfull kinda way
and u know i'm always open for ne thin u gotta say
If i eva have a chance just give me a call,or write
and i dont lets just keep our relationship tight

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Mike1Sacks@aol.com

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Black Rain
Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 60
California, USA
1 posted 1999-07-24 10:02 PM


You have great talent, keep up the good work
Princess Lily
Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 149
USA
2 posted 1999-07-29 01:09 AM


This is starting to seem really funny.I think i broke a guy's heart in the way that you explain in your poems and his name was mike.Kinda freaky huh?~Lily

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We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe

*A rose is a rose it withers and dies...so long as you keep it the memories stay alive*


mike2sacks
Junior Member
since 1999-07-29
Posts 18
brooklyn ny
3 posted 1999-07-29 01:25 AM


Theres a diference im not depressed ne more for reasons like that..i grew up i guess.....plus now i have bigger problems....i get any girl i wantthe problem is theres only 1 girl i want and i have her,but shes convinced im cheating on her b/c so many girls aroung bklyn here tell every 1 they had sex with me....and that prolem is giving me massive writers block

but im also looking for someone else..im screwed up..idunno

Mike1sacks
Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa
4 posted 1999-07-30 02:04 AM


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Mike1sacks
Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa
5 posted 1999-07-30 01:36 PM


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*~*butterfly*~*
Junior Member
since 1999-07-26
Posts 28
minnesota
6 posted 1999-07-31 12:58 PM


not bad, you have a great talent and you should be more optimistic about your work! i think your work is great
*later*
~kas~

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