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Addie Anne
Junior Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 46
norman, oklahoma- usa

0 posted 1999-07-22 10:21 AM


he says i'm a disfunctional girl
he says i'm only sinning my way into hell
he tells me i'm his star
and then he throws me down hard
his bitch claims
that i hear voices in my head
well who are they to call me crazy,
i'm not crazy.
he says i'm a whore with nothing to offer
he says my life is full of manipulative dishonsesties
he tells me i'm his child
and then he throws me to the fires
his bitch claims we have so much in common
well then shes crazy too
but i'm not crazy
who are they to call me crazy?
daddy says i'm crazy.
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this is about my father and his wife which is my second step-mom

[This message has been edited by Addie Anne (edited 07-22-99).]

© Copyright 1999 Addie Anne - All Rights Reserved
Ashley Lawrence
Junior Member
since 1999-07-21
Posts 13
Bloomindale, IL US
1 posted 1999-07-22 02:27 PM




Who is he?
Is he your old boyfriend, bestfriend, God, your father? whom?



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~ashley~
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DreamEvil
Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

2 posted 1999-07-22 11:05 PM


Profoundly touching, my dear. I feel echoes of your pain. Well done.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
DreamEvil©



heaven_0401
Junior Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 19
Australia
3 posted 1999-07-22 11:15 PM


Magnificent pain, as i read it i can feel your hurt and anger pouring out. Great talent is shown here. I HOPE YOU work it out and you get the best that you deserve.

all the best for the future
love heaven

Addie Anne
Junior Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 46
norman, oklahoma- usa
4 posted 1999-07-25 11:50 AM


thanks a bunch everyone-

mike2sacks
Junior Member
since 1999-07-29
Posts 18
brooklyn ny
5 posted 1999-07-29 08:36 AM


you got me bout to cry b/c i can relate so much...take a picture me crying is not gonna happen often

:'(

Addie Anne
Junior Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 46
norman, oklahoma- usa
6 posted 1999-07-29 11:40 AM


i'm sorry. so you liked it?
yeah, it sux having a parent not want you. it's something no child should ever have to go through, but it happens.
thanks for commenting on it:-) it means a lot. *addie

Mike1sacks
Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa
7 posted 1999-07-29 11:44 AM


how could i not like it,it was amzing...ho wold r yu?

Kiya
Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 31
Kingston Springs,Tn.,U.S.
8 posted 1999-07-29 01:13 PM


That poem was intellectually touching. I really got a feeling of what you are going through. It's dreadful that you have to go through that pain. I wish I could help you, writing for me has always been a way for me to maintain my pain. It makes it a whole lot more bearable.

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Kiya Nicole



Addie Anne
Junior Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 46
norman, oklahoma- usa
9 posted 1999-07-29 01:18 PM


thank you,
i am 16 and i'm almost 17 in november! mom says i act more mature for my age, whatever she means by that. life is hard, but if you think of it as tomorrow is going to be 10xs shitier then you can make today worthwhile, i dunno. but thank you all for your comments.
*addie

Mike1sacks
Member
since 1999-07-24
Posts 103
Bklyn ny,usa
10 posted 1999-07-29 03:39 PM


my problem is im15 and i live the life of a 25 yr old

i live with a roomate in my own apt,i drive.
I'm a licenced paramedic

i wanna get married

im TOO mature for my age]
WAy too mature

Ashley2405
Junior Member
since 1999-07-18
Posts 28
West Columbia, South Carolina 29170
11 posted 1999-07-29 05:09 PM


geez mike! how are you a liscenced paramedic? are you the next doogie howser?? lol. anyways, about the poem, it was so touching, i know so many people who can relate to it. writing always helps me deal with any problem i have. it's a way of releasing all my pissed-offness into something much more positive than breaking my hand from punching a wall. i used to get so depressed but now i've found someone to fill my void of not having someone to be with (a boyfriend.) i haven't been depressed once since we got together. okay, enough about me! sorry!! anyways, great poem.

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Sweet T
Member
since 1999-06-14
Posts 64
mesa, arizona maricopa
12 posted 1999-07-29 06:23 PM


Hey another award winner. I have problems with my step-father. So when I read this I just put the emotions from that experience into this. You are a very talented person. Although I am older than you I feel as if I could call you my equal in some aspects. If you want I have a poem that I am working on that kind of fits into the pain you have for your father. The only problem is I have only one line. But in truth that one line says that if I gave you love could you love again?
And I know that is what you want from your father. So let me know.
Always a friend
Sweet T

Addie Anne
Junior Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 46
norman, oklahoma- usa
13 posted 1999-07-29 09:29 PM


thanks ashley, and sweetT.
ashley, can i make a suggestion? well, don't rely on your boyfriend to make you happy. you need to rely on yourself. once he leaves then you have no one to rely on for love and strength. you need to find love and strength inside yourself, and then with others. i just don't want someone else to go through what i've just gone through AGAIN.
keep that in mind. but don't take what i've said personal, just a bit of advice:-)
but thanks again both. sweetT, thank you.

nicnac8
Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46
New York, N.Y. USA
14 posted 1999-07-30 01:33 AM


what a sad poem. it reminds me of a situation i had with my mom and her boyfriend-he was an asshole.
things will work out eventually.

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