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Ashley2405
Junior Member
since 1999-07-18
Posts 28
West Columbia, South Carolina 29170

0 posted 1999-07-20 01:14 AM


I really have not been feeling well
I know I'll be coming home soon
But before I leave you all
Would you lead me to my room?

Lie me on my bed
Kiss me one last time
No, baby please don't cry,
Mommy will be fine.

I can already smell the roses
And see the big blue sky
Mommy's feeling better now
She's not afraid to die.

It's not so scary after all
Just look into my eyes
The fear has left my body
My soul is beginning to rise...

Mommy will be just okay
Baby, don't you cry
I will always be watching over you
I will always be by your side.

If you ever need me
Just call for me, I'll be near
Mommy's always with you
No matter where you are, I'm here.

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*})i({*Ash*})i({*

© Copyright 1999 Ashley2405 - All Rights Reserved
murf1_00
Junior Member
since 1999-07-19
Posts 20

1 posted 1999-07-20 05:27 PM


Another great one. This poem captures the feeling of death yet helps you to see that they are leaving to a better place. I hope that peeps who are in this situation somehow find this poem cause I think that its help ease their pain.
Ashley Lawrence
Junior Member
since 1999-07-21
Posts 13
Bloomindale, IL US
2 posted 1999-07-21 01:52 PM




I loved it.
Death is a very beautiful thing.
Death means going home to my Father in heaven. I am truely not afrid to die.
I love your poems! Keep on writing!

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~ashley~
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Ashley2405
Junior Member
since 1999-07-18
Posts 28
West Columbia, South Carolina 29170
3 posted 1999-07-21 03:15 PM


thanks for the compliments! it was written for my aunt dianne who has been very sick lately, for the past couple years. one day she was feeling so badly that she just lay on the floor, almost gone, already smelling the roses. thank god that she is still with us, i love her. but i know that once she comes home, all the pain will be gone and she won't have to hurt anymore.

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Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551
Pennsylvania
4 posted 1999-07-21 10:45 PM


That was a great poem. Keep them coming. I am not afraid to die either. Thanks again.
AnGeL666
Junior Member
since 1999-07-11
Posts 12
Minnetonka
5 posted 1999-07-21 10:55 PM


I think that your poem captured the other sid of death. The short, sweet side that symbolisis (sorry, bad spelling day)a new beginning.

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mARiA

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