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heaven_0401
Junior Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 19
Australia

0 posted 1999-07-12 08:47 AM


I am lost
So utterly lost wihtin of you
The mess of me
Is tangled far too deep inside you
Casting a web of hate, pain and lies
Shadowing
Love happiness and honesty
So many emotions
Choke me inside
Building the destruction
Between you and I
Infactuation, Obsession and longing
Tear Away
As a long hurtful stabbing
Anchores my crying heart
Will you ever be able to reach me?
Or will i forever dorown in the deep sea
The unforgiving sea of misery
Will you be able to untangle
The sad depressed and lonely me
Abstracting nothinless
Reflecting more than everything
Shinings of love
Hide the clouds of hate
As happiness bellows
As sadness escapes
Togetherness indents lonliness
A piece of you
Is entwined to a piece of me

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DreamEvil
Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

1 posted 1999-07-18 08:46 AM


With a little work on meter, I think you might want to try this one in Open.

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Being paranoid is the biggest reason I'm still around to practice my paranoia.
DreamEvil©


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