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pun83
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since 1999-07-07
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FALMOUTH ,MA. U.S.A

0 posted 1999-07-07 09:21 AM


there is a person i know
his name is joe
he has nothing to show
he wanted more
but became very poor
so his wife kicked him out the door
he had to get a job
with a guy named bob
he wanted a raise
and a lot of praise
but instead he got the boot
he lost his will
and decided to kill
and now joe is nomore

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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
1 posted 1999-07-07 08:52 PM


Pretty good, until the last couple of lines.... Can you rewrite them?

SuGaH2432
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 2
E.Falmouth mass usa
2 posted 1999-07-08 08:45 AM


nice poem pun!!!!!its very.......nice!
roxy8365
Junior Member
since 1999-07-07
Posts 27
e.falmouth MA usa
3 posted 1999-07-08 08:50 AM


i love big punisher

roxy8365
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 27
e.falmouth MA usa
4 posted 1999-07-08 08:57 AM


sorry, pun. tom wrote that. but i still luv ya!!

habeebpetersen@hotmail
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 28
falmouth MA usa
5 posted 1999-07-08 09:00 AM


tat was a ioud poen yo ciserly thom

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