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invertigo18
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since 1999-06-14
Posts 53
Prairieville, LA., USA

0 posted 1999-07-01 01:59 PM


Hate, hate your friends
Pretend to love them
Pretend you care.
Pretend, when there's nothing there.

Thorn in my side
Will never subside
The hate within
For all the sin

A coward
A hero
A liar
A zero.

What will come of this?
When will it end?
Wading in your piss
Fake and pretend.

The ocean of pain
will consume you in vain.
The ocean of pain
will make you insane.

Your way is wrong.
My way is strong.
For I am a hero.
And you're nothing
but a zero.

Remember this
And the hate within.
Hate yourself
'Cause you can't pretend.

Anymore




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Luke Cakalic

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poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
Arkansas
1 posted 1999-08-11 01:09 PM


This poem shows the quality in your work...have you ever posted in the Open Forum? I think the folks in there would appreciate the depth you have in your words....I can't believe no one has replied to your work...that's why I think you'd get better response in the other forum. Try it, there are some truly exquisite poets in there, I know they will like your stuff. I'd love to get inside your head...how long have you been writing?

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet


Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
2 posted 1999-08-11 10:19 PM


I mustive missed this one!! Absolutely wonderful...I do agree with poetFemmeFatale, you should post in the open forum..it seems more people there would appreciate your talent!

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*Krista Knutson*

"Your kiss upon my face feels like a brush with grace, baby thats all it takes to take me higher..." SHeDaisy

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