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Raven
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since 1999-06-14
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Hopewell Jct, New York, USA

0 posted 1999-06-16 10:31 PM


She followed the sun when all was a'gloom
Scared of the night,
For its pale silent moon
Tears are the souls of those fallen from grace
Lit up by the stars
Hov'ring in space
The life that she lead was blackened with doom
For never could she escape the pale silent moon

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"They sing the stories of the present, of people trapped in a shadow world" ~Charlotte Seley~

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Alwye
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In the space between moments
1 posted 1999-06-28 12:59 PM


Well, Raven, I missed a good one. I was going back and responding to poems with no responses, as suggested, and I found a gem. I really like this, especially the line-- Tears are the souls of those fallen from grace. Very good.

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*Krista Knutson*

Haskins
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since 1999-06-26
Posts 85
Dallas, TX
2 posted 1999-06-28 01:04 AM


I like the imagery.
I look forward to reading more.

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William Haskins
http://www.ionstorm.com/public/haskins/inner_sanctum.htm

Alwye
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In the space between moments
3 posted 1999-07-09 05:21 PM


I was looking back and thought I'd bring some gems from a while ago back to the front...and I loved this one.

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*Krista Knutson*

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
4 posted 1999-07-31 02:02 AM


I had to look more of your work up after reading the poem you posted in Open Poetry. I have no idea how old you are, but you are a most talented poet. You need to get this stuff out to some publishers!
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