British Columbia, Canada
Jarrett, I loved your first poem - but I do believe you have posted this in the wrong area, as this is a discussion area.
Perhaps email a Moderator or Administrator (click the link on top of the page), and ask them to move your great offering from Feelings to Open Poetry,(or if you are a teen,) to the Teen Poetry Forum. It won't get many readers in here.
BUT I sure enjoyed it and