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jarrett
Member

since 2006-05-10

Posts 72
Ut, USA

0 posted 2006-05-13 12:04 PM

Here am I
there are you
waiting for forever
in this garden for two

Here am I
Dreaming of you
There you are
Staring at her

Waiting for forever
To hold your hand
In this garden for two
But

Here am I
There are you
In two separate worlds
Waiting for forever
In this garden for two

Those who say sunshine bring true happiness hasn't danced in the rain!!!

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2006-05-13 12:30 PM

Jarrett, I loved your first poem - but I do believe you have posted this in the wrong area, as this is a discussion area.

Perhaps email a Moderator or Administrator (click the link on top of the page), and ask them to move your great offering from Feelings to Open Poetry,(or if you are a teen,) to the Teen Poetry Forum. It won't get many readers in here.

BUT I sure enjoyed it and

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

2 posted 2006-05-13 01:40 PM

Jarrett~
A hearty WELCOME to PiP !!

Your thoughts flow poetically beautifully~

I would agree that this beauty will get more reads in one of the other forums ...
but, hey, ... it definitely has feeling~

We have so many forums for you to choose from and know you'll find many readers to cultivate as friends~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

sandgrain
Member Elite

since 1999-09-21

Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA

3 posted 2006-05-13 06:35 PM

I was surprised to find this in here, but I do want to bid you a warm welcome. Nice work.

Rae

jarrett
Member

since 2006-05-10

Posts 72
Ut, USA

4 posted 2006-05-13 10:54 PM

Sorry ya'll... I am new here and just trying to figure things out... thanks for your kindness.

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

5 posted 2006-05-21 10:33 PM

Welcome to piptalk! Yeah I agree. You did post this in the wrong area. Really nice work. It flows very well and has good structure. Gosh I really getting worse and worse at this. lol. Bravo.

Jessica

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