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Her Broken Cage

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JesusChristPose
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0 posted 03-14-2005 09:39 AM       Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JesusChristPose

I built this cage in which I lived
It was the place that I called home
I often wondered if I could
Dismantle it and go

Created from a family
A wife, daughter, and son
With tools found in my heart and mind
As I cared for each as one

I gave the lock to loved ones
Myself, I kept the key
As time went by, I realized
I may be forced to leave

But the key I held was fragile
And the lock was shared by few
Unlocking it could cause great pain
And crack the key in two

I see the gate, it's open now
It's time to leave my lair
Without a cry to pin me down
I fly into the air

It came upon a cold Sunday
When one would feel no pain
She stole the key and to my surprise
The lock was now open

But it was not to be a solo flight
As towards me flew another
Together we'll both begin our lives
Without a wife and caring mother

Because our needs were less important
Than her personal desires
So, she will be much better off
Alone within those wires  

And she'll stay perched contently
As she slowly grays with age
Ignorant of what was lost
Inside her broken cage

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1 posted 03-14-2005 10:17 AM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

This has a beautiful but ominous feel to it, softly suggesting few have a willingness to release themselves from every form of earthly cage. I wasn't sure if the remaining caged spirit was personal, or metaphorical. Not being Christian, I may not be understanding all the Christ/spirit/sacrificial implications you might be intending here.
It's an interesting write, but I think if you registered as a poet, maybe made JesusChristPose the title of this post, post it in Open forum, rather than JCP as your posting name, you would get more readings. Kacy
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2 posted 03-20-2005 09:33 AM       Edit/Delete Message     View IP for JesusChristPose

Kacy,

Thanks for your advice and for taking time to read this...
 
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