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Open Poetry #39

A poem from me

ozlem
Junior Member

since 2006-10-06

Posts 16

0 posted 2006-10-07 12:09 PM

Life sharpens me
I can bleed you
Get away from me
If you don't want to get hurt

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2006-10-07 02:50 PM

Welcome to Passions
I read this a few times...
You portray this extremely well...enough to evoke a pause, even in the reader.

Each cut that bleeds, empties a vast and endless place that fills again with the softness of loving tears.

TD

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

2 posted 2006-10-07 11:17 PM

grabbed me by
the heart ozlem

welcome...

Triskaidekaphobia
Member

since 2003-02-05

Posts 251
In a state of disrepair...

3 posted 2006-10-08 04:25 AM

Well I too would like to welcome you. Somehow I missed your first post.

A very good poem too. Simple and too the point. I hope to see more from you soon

"The world won't end in darkness, it'll end in family fun
With Coca Cola clouds behind a Big Mac sun."

One God by The Beautiful South

seraphin
Senior Member

since 2000-09-24

Posts 1004
Michigan

4 posted 2006-10-08 10:48 AM

Welcome to passions.

I read this shortly after you posted, and came back repeatedly to read it over. A reply was difficult to formulate, not because the work is lacking, for it is not. Standing on the page it is excellent.
What gave me pause was the mindset that created the work.

So now my comment. An excellent write that makes the reader THINK.

I absolutely look forward to reading more of your work.

Sandra

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

5 posted 2006-10-08 10:57 AM

It grinds on us all....and eventually you do take an edge.....

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ozlem
Junior Member

since 2006-10-06

Posts 16

6 posted 2006-10-08 04:00 PM

Thanks for your encouring comments.

It was just a try. I wrote it on friday night because of an uneasy feeling i was caught up.

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