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Lousy Timing
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Lousy Timing |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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You’re standing there with scythe in hand – Is this fulfilling some great plan? I denounce it and spit on you – You’re ignorant of what you do! Where was your cloak when cowed, I shivered Praying that I might be delivered From one more dawn, from one more fight? Where were you on those endless nights? Where were you when tears formed their trail Down trembling cheeks that choked back wail, When despair liquefied my bones? I’d nothing left to call my own. I’ve scratched and clawed my way to light And NOW I look to see the sight Of finger commanding I follow? The unfairness is hard to swallow! But wait! I will not follow meek! If you want me, then you must speak. Just hear my answer, loud and clear – Get lost, Death, you’re not wanted here! |
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Refugee Member
since 2006-08-04
Posts 97 |
Great stuff. I love that ending. "But wait! I will not follow meek! If you want me, then you must speak." Cool writing. |
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Triskaidekaphobia Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 251In a state of disrepair... |
A wonderful poem. I enjoyed it immensely. And a marvellous summation too, one of the best endings to a poem I have read in a while. "Get lost, Death, you’re not wanted here!" No, you cannot interest me in a game of chess! Get lost!  "The world won't end in darkness, it'll end in family fun |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern The shadow that chases you chases me too. Come we will stand together.  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetFriend~ Such an emotional scream ... loud and clear~ Sending *HUGLETS*  ... and lending my voice too~ !!!! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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MukkaKukka Member
since 2006-09-18
Posts 88Finland |
"Yes, he finally sold it, the day before he killed himself." "Good timing." (Boris Balkan and Dean Corso Converse.) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sending heart hugs your way dear lady~ Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I like your attitude girl, I don't listen to ANY man anymore  especially this one! |
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MukkaKukka Member
since 2006-09-18
Posts 88Finland |
Those that struggle the most at the hands of death end up in great agonies, and they never end, and if they do, well, the same grind is ahead, after you choose the door youll wake up after a few months, and that`s in a church as your head is being watered, then this is another change, to do what? learn to die in peace, without struggle. |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
Once again, you have taken an issue that is spoken silently in everyones heart, and spread it out in the brilliant light. The outcome is masterful. Very well done, and done only as you could do it. Sandra |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ruth...Here's that backbone of inner strength that I admire and the guts to yell it outloud. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Have to ditto Martie here... a good rant and rave, Poet. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
excellent! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Not you, no way.....I know you feel weak sometimes, but there is a core of strength in you that leaves me in awe when it shows through..... But what a poem! It's like a banner that's worthy of marching under. Proud to know you, I am. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Do not go gently into that good night ey? Hell no! Don't go at all  outstanding!! |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Wow! This is ... this is amazing. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Suthern girl...I do like your southern spunk! I'll fight right along with you, okay? ....jo |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
That Grim Reaper daresn't take you before your time! ~ or he'll have to face a formidable avenging angel! Like you, when he shows me his ugly face, I scream like hell and scare him off! Give 'em hell, Harri-ette! Linda |
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