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ChePacifica Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 58Ignore Alien Orders |
Turned it over And on the back Was to Papa with Love In faded black More than mush In the bottom of a bowl More than mush To a well trained soul Lights were dim And the clues were found Hanging on the wall Sleeping in the ground The distant hum Of a stereo sound Cracking in two As the rain came down |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Cherishing memories of your Papa...at least, that is what I got from this series of snapshots. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Kacy, I think you might be correct.. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I like the ethereal sound of this -- like bits of the fullness that is there, just enough that the mind can build the melody around what the ear can almost, almost, hear. That's poetry, m'friend..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this reminds me of a song, but I can't recall the name or even the words very well done! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
it's a beautifully poignant poem ChePacifica |
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ChePacifica Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 58Ignore Alien Orders |
thnx everybody for the read |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
hey Che! thanks for all the good new tunes! I am enjoying the heck outta garageband! kacy is kickin back, tappin fingers and toes from blues to rock to reggae to folk and back again...  LOL...new to me, EvetsKralc hey, I want my star too! |
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MukkaKukka Member
since 2006-09-18
Posts 88Finland |
The last verse is the best part, its how shall we say it, one of those moments that, you dare not concentrate on the rain, or sun and you listen to these echoes like you drink and eat shadows of energy and bam! It hits you as you play the song, the double kick back, moment of awakening before you slumber back into coma. I mean have you ever known a truly happy person, or a person fully awake, open? |
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ChePacifica Member
since 2006-09-26
Posts 58Ignore Alien Orders |
well thanks everybody - hey midnight fanks a million for the listen glad your digging GB ! |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
I agree with you on the coffee gods line  Yep, I am listening, too.I like your work. That may not seem like such a statement, except that I look for your work to read. So, in effect, it IS a statement. I feel there is a difference between a Poet's heart, and a Poet's pen. Appreciation VS ability. You seem to have both, which is something I truly envy, being as I do have the heart. Sandra |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
I enjoyed and the last stanza is dynamite. |
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