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Don't Want To
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Don't Want To |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
i can beat my breast tell you all how sad i am how my dog has mange or my cats are actually fish with fur. i can swill in my misery, drowned in my despair, suffocate in sadness cut my teeth on the souls of others sharpen my claws and take my pound of flesh i can rip and tear and shred i can fold, spindle and mutilate if i want. … i just don’t want to. aziza |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
And I'm glad you don't. There are enough country western songs about all the sadness of life. Better to be an inspiration, an upbeat writer, or even a humorist. I like this write, though. Rae |
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seraphin Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1004Michigan |
wonderful!!!!! I love it! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"I just don't want to." ~ Whew! That's a relief!  I love your spunk 'n spirit ~ and everything you write that I have the privilege to read! And remember, tomorrow is another day! May it be a better one! Giving you a big, understanding and compassionate hug, EA |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"i just don’t want to." spoken like a strong woman Alison I love it... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
'Atta girl! |
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nick_lyss Member
since 2006-08-21
Posts 88 |
you are a great poet.its kind of a sad poem but its really good |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
It only takes a trigger my friend Amazing how the thought of moment makes us concider and then refrain. The mind of someone who would like to does not concider the outcome. Sounds like time for a long walk, the company of good friends, an animal to talk to and hold, some yelling where no one will hear and moments to call your own. Life is made of choices, or so I am told. Thanks for sharing your thoughts my friend, hope you are well and trying to enjoy life. Sincerely Rick |
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arwen54 Junior Member
since 2006-09-07
Posts 13Welland, Ontario |
doesn't it feel great to let out your emotions? I think your poem is passionate and strong... very good! there's only one thing I would change and that is the word "drowned" to "drown" since your poem is in the present tense except for that verb  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
strongly stated, and very well written. Good for you, hon! |
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