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The Weed
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The Weed |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
The Weed Upon a winter’s morn you came, High upon a snow white steed. Your visage bright, as if aflame, You sought me as you called my name: You, the beauty, I, the weed. Your tinkling laughter lifts my soul, Although, hidden I remained. My ice-filled heart as black as coal, Yet, moved! And never quite as full, My youthful spirit still waned. The ground trod bare beneath your trail Missed the life of springtime days. When flowers and weeds, oh so frail, Were injured oft by sudden hail And healed by the sun’s soft rays. But I, a lonely weed of doubt Hid well amongst the flowers, Was nevertheless want to shout And turn your goodness ‘round about To wait for springtime showers. For, just a lowly weed, and still… You dismount and seek my face. My shyness but a bitter pill, I swallow hard and try to feel That I am worth your tender grace. A gentle wind blows warm and mild On burdens that I carry. Your kind embrace, as with a child, Would melt the heart of one so wild As once again you tarry. And, lo! What wonders do you sense? You kindly tend my bower. Around my heart was built a fence. I tear it down for all days hence, And change from weed to flower. You, the beauty, I the flower, Sow a field of varied seeds. For we understand the power; All the love and care we shower Turns to flowers any weeds. Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This is awesome. |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, TD. You're awesome (for saying so, amongst other things...)! John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
Aahhh....the flower within. Excellent write, John. Liked the flow, the rhyme scheme, and the content. CG |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Excellent work, much enjoyed! |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Thanks, CastleGuard. I guess that I was feeling a little angst mixed with a little whimsy. John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, Gentle Spirit. I had fun writing it, so we're kind of equal! John Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
John....I've always seen weeds as lovely when care is taken of their fragile nature. A weed, after all, is in the eyes of the beholder.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I love the way you write with just the right touch of whimsy. Most excellent indeed.  Autumn, the year's last loveliest smile~ |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"And change from weed to flower" sigh... you write so well |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, Martie. Oh! Then you should read my poem, "The Breath of Life." I'll post it, today. John xo Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, Enchantress. I love whimsy! *sigh* Thanks for your kind words... John xo Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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JLHunter Senior Member
since 2006-10-08
Posts 557CA United States |
Hi, TL. "sigh... you write so well" *sigh* You comment so well!  John xo Pinky: Gee, Brain, what are we going to do tonight? |
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