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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2006-06-10 02:43 PM

Eating pasta
smoking butts
sipping leftover wine
and doing the afterchat
of lovers,

laughing and listening,

pretending i know
what you're talking about
as if i could keep up with
the brilliant one -

hah !!!!!!!!

pretending this won't end,

pretending life/love/art
isn't fragile as
whats happening right before us,

surrounding us as we speak;

look at them baby!

did you see them too?

i stopped after 5,
couldn't watch them fly off anymore.

(counting the falling leaves
in your summer garden
on an autumn afternoon)

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2006-06-10 02:47 PM

"pretending this won't end,

pretending life/love/art
isn't fragile as
whats happening right before us"

Beautiful ans so honest Michele...
Love this one!
Hugs~Nancy

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain ~

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2006-06-15 11:18 PM

taking in the fall, and being a part of it all, gathers up so much emotion~

It's always a pleasure to read you, golden girl~

Edward Grim
Senior Member

since 2005-12-18

Posts 1154
Greenville, South Carolina

3 posted 2006-06-15 11:26 PM

This is great. I love the fire. Cheers - Ed

I'm not smart, I'm just a tricky dumb person.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

4 posted 2006-06-16 08:24 AM

ms inky..
I think I would try for 6 or 7 next time
counting helps us measure where we have been and set goals for longer moments..

I like your work babe!!

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2006-06-16 09:12 AM

"pretending life/love/art
isn't fragile"

how true is that? Life is full of pretending, to the point of such pain sometimes...but it's the pain that reminds me I am still alive.

I love reading you Ms. Inky.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

6 posted 2006-06-16 12:18 PM

"Eating pasta
smoking butts
sipping leftover wine"

Brought back a lot of memories.
Good one.

JL

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

7 posted 2006-06-17 05:59 PM

Inka dinka bottle of ink, who wa this......

Only kidding. Not bad.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2006-06-17 06:49 PM

I was visualizing birds flying off of a branch or from the ground...
and then reading it was falling leaves, well,
that certainly put another slant on this entirely.
Meanwhile, I'm trying to NOT count...

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

9 posted 2006-06-18 11:55 AM

Had read this before, without the time to reply right then. Want to say that I know of this kind of melancholy and recognized its intensity in your great poem, dear Michele.

You always offer authenticity and true poetry.

Love,
Margherita

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

10 posted 2006-06-18 01:23 PM

thanks for tallying along w/me

The Lady
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

11 posted 2006-06-18 02:56 PM

"and doing the afterchat
of lovers"

Jewel of a line. The poem is palpable. I feel it.

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